Frizzenflyer
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« on: April 05, 2015, 05:26:51 AM » |
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I feel that Jedi should be not only proficient with his/her saber and with force techniques, but also in other skills in the realm of the arts. For example poetry. In feudal Japan samurai were expected to be able to demonstrate such skills to their superiors and daimyos. The traditional haiku is two lines of descriptor or question (five syllables in the first line, seven in the second) followed by an answer (the third line, five syllables long) for example: The flash of sabers, a mans fate is decided. To falter or soar. Please pardon my wonky writing, I am tired and cannot sleep.
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Frizzenflyer
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« Reply #1 on: April 05, 2015, 05:29:39 AM » |
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In the lonely night, walks a lonely knight. Jumping at every sound, hoping not to be found. Not knowing if he is the last, but knowing that he must move fast. An enemy might be near, so he must not fall to fear. In the lonely night, he hides out of sight. on the subject of interaction with the force as a guiding element and meditation: Serenely floating, Swimming in the living force. At one with the world. And a short teaching lesson in the form of a poem. The padawan cannot be forced down the path of right, they must be led by a master who carries the light, and masters must learn as their students will, for a man will never learn if he stays still. Most of these are just thoughts jotted down in my notebooks that I am digging out, cleaning up, and posting.
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Frizzenflyer
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« Reply #2 on: April 06, 2015, 01:50:06 AM » |
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Form I, Shii Cho: In simple movements, and relentless attacking. The first form, Shii Cho. Form II, Makashi: Quick and precise cuts, delivered with eloquence. Form two, Makashi. Form III, Soresu: A perfect defense, serenity in the storm. Form three, Soresu.
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Frizzenflyer
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« Reply #3 on: April 09, 2015, 12:31:00 AM » |
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Will no one else write? My thread is getting lonely. Its too quiet here.
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Jerretron
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« Reply #4 on: April 10, 2015, 07:09:28 PM » |
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True inner peace is not easily had, Lesser beings have tried and gone completely mad For simple things: lust, love, and light. We must find the will to fight Against the darkness that lies inside And quell the vicious, bloody tide.
When they speak of a heroes internal plight- It's just a villain's actions taking flight. Inside the hero a struggle will always ensue, To stay in the light and be just and true; It comes down to a line so thin and grey That falling Dark side is but a razors edge away.
I want to join the writing party! I really liked your Haiku.
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« Reply #5 on: April 10, 2015, 11:10:55 PM » |
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thank you, for joining me and for complimenting my haiku!
I like your second stanza.
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« Reply #6 on: April 14, 2015, 04:40:30 PM » |
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Thank you! I hope more people send in some poems/Haiku
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« Reply #7 on: January 24, 2016, 01:27:04 PM » |
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Some of my earlier sketches as a gaolactic explorer:
I. It might be a dawn Glittering and ice-cold Big bulky heads of rocks Rolling along with No passion of life And no emotions carved On their faces Do you have a name? Or you? It might be a day Somewhere But the dimensionless Blue fabric Is about to take A deep cosmic breath - Taking mine away It might be a dusk Embroidered with white sparks Through my cracked canopy With a flash of intense - My life Rooted in the Nameless Nowhere Now it is just like One of those tiny spots Doesn't matter which one On the silent dark tissue
It should be the night Hybernating my senses No more beeps from the dash This time Just fragile-deaf slide On the busy Asteroid-highway Alone One more wish left Before the countdown timer Clicks down to zero
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« Reply #8 on: February 06, 2016, 08:40:17 PM » |
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Another earlier one III. Another dawn Is floating onto the Sleepy night-sky Quietly Like it was an endless snake With cruel teeth And where it bites the Fluffy night-tapestry Her venom A patch of light Slowly spreads across The whole horizon And transforms the Planetscape Which now has a new Crown of light-scent Around What a play of The Cosmic Orchestra To fill up this Hall of Magnificence with Alto of awakening red and Treble of flickering yellow And It conceals the Old-night bass with a Cloak teared off from a Past piece of time We created around The emptiness My steps On the durasteel floor Of the muted docks Are encoding My upcoming journey Into the deepest Tissue of the universe As I approach to My Ship - I hear only a little Electronic signal A tiny sound in the Infinite silence The essential heart-beep Magnetizing my senses And sharpening my Desire to Jump into the unknown Through hyperspace
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« Reply #9 on: February 10, 2016, 02:55:49 PM » |
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So, uh, maybe a little late to the party here by a few days. I generally don't stray from the RPG section. But I wrote this poem for a character I've been planning in my head, and I'd love some brutally honest feedback. I know poetry isn't my strong point, so any criticisms are welcome to help me improve.
"I've trudged through the miry depths of the Force; Stood still in pristine heights. I have slumbered in its darkest corners; Fought battles in its light. I consummated with its fearsome wrath, The vows made with its peace. I found balance within a twilit path. I serve the Force between." ~Master Myrkri
K, so, that's it. It's meant to be the musings of an elderly Grey Jedi Master. His mantra, his meditations. He is looking back on his life and seeing everything he's done, everything he's gone through; he has been to all extremes within the Force. I kind of envision a scene where he is facing some massive foe, perhaps a powerful Sith who is trying to tempt him, and threatens that if he does not join, he will die. And Myrkri closes his eyes, folds his hands together, and recites this aloud, basically saying, "I have already seen everything you could offer me and more, more than you could ever imagine." Then he ignites his lightsaber and, to put it not-so-eloquently, just wrecks this Force-using wannabe little #$%^&. The poem itself follows a repeating syllable rhythm of 10;7, and a rhyme pattern of A,B,A,B,C,D,C,D. It alludes to a very intimate and treacherous relationship with the Force, both Dark and Light sides, before finally achieving true balance as a Grey Jedi.
Please tell me what you think, and be honest. I'm 23, I can take harsh critiques.
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« Reply #10 on: February 18, 2016, 11:10:52 PM » |
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This is one I just came up with in reference to The Force Awakens. A Jedi Master Waiting on a Mountain Top Approached by a Girl
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« Reply #11 on: February 20, 2016, 07:04:48 PM » |
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This is one I just came up with in reference to The Force Awakens. A Jedi Master Waiting on a Mountain Top Approached by a Girl Brilliant!
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