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Author Topic: The Sentinel Part 1  (Read 1652 times)
Darth Abaddon
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« on: December 24, 2012, 03:53:03 AM »

         Master Kast stood on the bridge of the Garuda as the pursuit of the Sith battle ship Aigaion took the Republic ship across the corners of the outer rim. Garuda had been chasing Aigaion for three weeks since the bombardment of Taris. Master Kast was tasked with disabling, boarding and retrieving the logs on the ship to assist in locating the Laviathan. On the last jump out of hyperspace the Garuda had come into firing range. As the Rebublic warship came into position the order to open fire came. ''Fire at will Captain. Concentrate all fire on the engines and the hyperdrive. I don't want to take any more chances.'' ''Aye, sir.'' Captain Marso replied. Captain  Maximilian Marso was Master Sato Kast's most trusted friend and ally. As the cannons and torpedo launchers ripped apart the engines and damaged the hyperdrive beyond repair, the Garuda moved into position and the boarding party prepared for what they must do next...


*Criticisms welcomed, good and bad. I'd prefer you to be blunt. If it sucks say it that way. I'll continue to post when I have time and have it written.
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« Reply #1 on: December 24, 2012, 09:04:45 AM »

         Master Kast stood on the bridge of the Garuda as the pursuit of the Sith battle ship Aigaion took the Republic ship across the corners of the outer rim. Garuda had been chasing Aigaion for three weeks since the bombardment of Taris. Master Kast was tasked with disabling, boarding and retrieving the logs on the ship to assist in locating the Laviathan. On the last jump out of hyperspace the Garuda had come into firing range. As the Rebublic warship came into position the order to open fire came. ''Fire at will Captain. Concentrate all fire on the engines and the hyperdrive. I don't want to take any more chances.'' ''Aye, sir.'' Captain Marso replied. Captain  Maximilian Marso was Master Sato Kast's most trusted friend and ally. As the cannons and torpedo launchers ripped apart the engines and damaged the hyperdrive beyond repair, the Garuda moved into position and the boarding party prepared for what they must do next...


*Criticisms welcomed, good and bad. I'd prefer you to be blunt. If it sucks say it that way. I'll continue to post when I have time and have it written.

Sorry for double post. I know it needs editing and expansion, this is just a rough draft so I can see what the feedback is for the storyline
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« Reply #2 on: December 24, 2012, 05:20:30 PM »

Too short to really tell. Is it just a oneshot, or is there more?
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Darth Abaddon
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« Reply #3 on: December 24, 2012, 09:08:35 PM »

There's gonna hopefully be a LOT more. That's more or less just the opener.
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