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Frizzenflyer
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« on: April 05, 2015, 05:26:51 AM »

I feel that Jedi should be not only proficient with his/her saber and with force techniques, but also in other skills in the realm of the arts. For example poetry. In feudal Japan samurai were expected to be able to demonstrate such skills to their superiors and daimyos.

The traditional haiku is two lines of descriptor or question (five syllables in the first line, seven in the second) followed by an answer (the third line, five syllables long)

for example:
The flash of sabers,
a mans fate is decided.
To falter or soar.

Please pardon my wonky writing, I am tired and cannot sleep.

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« Reply #1 on: April 05, 2015, 05:29:39 AM »

In the lonely night,
walks a lonely knight.
Jumping at every sound,
hoping not to be found.
Not knowing if he is the last,
but knowing that he must move fast.
An enemy might be near,
so he must not fall to fear.
In the lonely night,
he hides out of sight.

on the subject of interaction with the force as a guiding element and meditation:
Serenely floating,
Swimming in the living force.
At one with the world.

And a short teaching lesson in the form of a poem.
The padawan cannot be forced down the path of right,
they must be led by a master who carries the light,
and masters must learn as their students will,
for a man will never learn if he stays still.

Most of these are just thoughts jotted down in my notebooks that I am digging out, cleaning up, and posting.

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« Reply #2 on: April 06, 2015, 01:50:06 AM »

Form I, Shii Cho:
In simple movements,
and relentless attacking.
The first form, Shii Cho.

Form II, Makashi:
Quick and precise cuts,
delivered with eloquence.
Form two, Makashi.

Form III, Soresu:
A perfect defense,
serenity in the storm.
Form three, Soresu.
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« Reply #3 on: April 09, 2015, 12:31:00 AM »

Will no one else write?
My thread is getting lonely.
Its too quiet here.
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« Reply #4 on: April 10, 2015, 07:09:28 PM »

True inner peace is not easily had,
Lesser beings have tried and gone completely mad
For simple things: lust, love, and light.
We must find the will to fight
Against the darkness that lies inside
And quell the vicious, bloody tide.


When they speak of a heroes internal plight-
It's just a villain's actions taking flight.
Inside the hero a struggle will always ensue,
To stay in the light and be just and true;
It comes down to a line so thin and grey
That falling Dark side is but a razors edge away.


I want to join the writing party! I really liked your Haiku. 
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« Reply #5 on: April 10, 2015, 11:10:55 PM »

thank you, for joining me and for complimenting my haiku!

I like your second stanza.
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« Reply #6 on: April 14, 2015, 04:40:30 PM »

Thank you! I hope more people send in some poems/Haiku 
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« Reply #7 on: January 24, 2016, 01:27:04 PM »

Some of my earlier sketches as a gaolactic explorer:

I.
 
It might be a dawn
Glittering and ice-cold
Big bulky heads of rocks
Rolling along with
No passion of life
And no emotions carved
On their faces
Do you have a name?
Or you?
 
It might be a day
Somewhere
But the dimensionless
Blue fabric
Is about to take
A deep cosmic breath -
Taking mine away
 
It might be a dusk
Embroidered with white sparks
Through my cracked canopy
With a flash of intense -
My life
Rooted in the
Nameless Nowhere
Now it is just like
One of those tiny spots
Doesn't matter which one
On the silent dark tissue

It should be the night
Hybernating my senses
No more beeps from the dash
This time
Just fragile-deaf slide
On the busy
Asteroid-highway
Alone
One more wish left
Before the countdown timer
Clicks down to zero

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« Reply #8 on: February 06, 2016, 08:40:17 PM »

Another earlier one Smiley

III.

Another dawn
Is floating onto the
Sleepy night-sky
Quietly
Like it was an endless snake
With cruel teeth 
And where it bites the
Fluffy night-tapestry
Her venom
A patch of light
Slowly spreads across
The whole horizon
And transforms the
Planetscape
Which now has a new
Crown of light-scent
Around

What a play of
The Cosmic Orchestra
To fill up this
Hall of Magnificence with
Alto of awakening red and
Treble of flickering yellow
And
It conceals the
Old-night bass with a
Cloak teared off from a
Past piece of time
We created around
The emptiness

My steps
On the durasteel floor
Of the muted docks
Are encoding
My upcoming journey
Into the deepest
Tissue of the universe
As I approach to
My Ship -
I hear only a little
Electronic signal
A tiny sound in the
Infinite silence
The essential heart-beep
Magnetizing my senses
And sharpening my
Desire to
Jump into the unknown
Through hyperspace

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« Reply #9 on: February 10, 2016, 02:55:49 PM »

So, uh, maybe a little late to the party here by a few days. I generally don't stray from the RPG section. But I wrote this poem for a character I've been planning in my head, and I'd love some brutally honest feedback. I know poetry isn't my strong point, so any criticisms are welcome to help me improve.

"I've trudged through the miry depths of the Force;
Stood still in pristine heights.
I have slumbered in its darkest corners;
Fought battles in its light.
I consummated with its fearsome wrath,
The vows made with its peace.
I found balance within a twilit path.
I serve the Force between."
~Master Myrkri


K, so, that's it. It's meant to be the musings of an elderly Grey Jedi Master. His mantra, his meditations. He is looking back on his life and seeing everything he's done, everything he's gone through; he has been to all extremes within the Force. I kind of envision a scene where he is facing some massive foe, perhaps a powerful Sith who is trying to tempt him, and threatens that if he does not join, he will die. And Myrkri closes his eyes, folds his hands together, and recites this aloud, basically saying, "I have already seen everything you could offer me and more, more than you could ever imagine." Then he ignites his lightsaber and, to put it not-so-eloquently, just wrecks this Force-using wannabe little #$%^&.
The poem itself follows a repeating syllable rhythm of 10;7, and a rhyme pattern of A,B,A,B,C,D,C,D. It alludes to a very intimate and treacherous relationship with the Force, both Dark and Light sides, before finally achieving true balance as a Grey Jedi.

Please tell me what you think, and be honest. I'm 23, I can take harsh critiques.
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« Reply #10 on: February 18, 2016, 11:10:52 PM »

This is one I just came up with in reference to The Force Awakens.

A Jedi Master
Waiting on a Mountain Top
Approached by a Girl
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« Reply #11 on: February 20, 2016, 07:04:48 PM »

This is one I just came up with in reference to The Force Awakens.

A Jedi Master
Waiting on a Mountain Top
Approached by a Girl

Brilliant! Smiley
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