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Author Topic: Path of the Sentinels: Part 2 Numbered Days  (Read 4940 times)
Kham-Ryn Kurios
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« on: September 02, 2011, 10:30:41 PM »

This is the second part of my story, here is a link to the first part.
http://www.saberforum.com/index.php?topic=2558.0

Enjoy.
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3,976 BBY Done with the bulk of his training he took his brief reprieve to search for his lost family, he found them, on Taris. Kai-El was a padawan learner at the Jedi Academy on Taris, their parents had long since past. Determined to reunite with his brother he contacted the academy and informed them of his coming. Upon his arrival to the Taris academy, Kai-El was standing on the platform waiting for his brother, as happy as the reunion was it was brief, Kham-Ryn had other plans as well. Given Kham-Ryn's new rank of Knight and long history of service for the Jedi, he was going to ask permission to take Kai-El as his padawan to Courascant. Reluctant though at first because the two were so close in age, the council ultimately ruled in his favor and granted Kham-Ryn his request, the two immediately set off back to Coruscant.
In 3,976 BBY the Mandolorian Wars began, the Mandalorians invading republic planets, brought chaos and death to where ever they struck; The councils' reluctance to get involved in the war effort did not sit well with either of the brothers. Four years later during 3,960 BBY Kham-Ryn and his padawan where tasked with leading a recon unit to the outer rim planet of Athir to apprehend two rouge Jedi and his army of followers named "Revanchists" and bring them to justice. The trip to Althir was a long one though and the brothers stayed rested and meditated most of the way.
Immediately upon landing they were attacked by Mandolorian forces, the ships turrets took care of most of the resistance the rest fell to troops exiting the back of the ship. But as fast as they put them down more kept replacing the fallen. The two Jedi and their war-band fell back into the hills evading the passing Mandalorians, after all had gone they pressed forward in the direction the Mandos had marched. They could see smoke in the distance, it was coming from a nearby settlement, the sounds of blaster fire could be heard in air, they set into the town laying waste to the occupying Madolorians; they battled for hours, all the way into the night bolts of red and blue lit the darkened settlement. Combat was weighing heavy on Kai-El who had never been in a battle as long as this, eventually their small band of troops was able to take back the town against the relentless Mandalorians. The following morning the Mandalorians continued their barrage, thinning the ranks of the Jedi's troops, at least fifteen men had been killed since arrival and only five were left plus Kham-Ryn and Kai-El, seven men against an army of oncoming foes. The sound of blaster fire came from behind, but it wasn't the Mandalorians it was Jedi and Republic troops, the cavalry had arrived and the battle was won relatively quickly  after that. Thanking the Jedi, for their intervention they were then to why the other Jedi were here, They said they were on Althir to fight the Mandalorians, they asked if they would like to march on the Mandolorian base with them, Kham-Ryn declined but was cut off by Kai-El who wanted to follow them. This led to arguing between the brothers and Kai-El leaving angrily with the other Jedi, left Kham-Ryn standing in bewilderment. That night Kham-Ryn did not sleep he dwelled on his brother and his brothers' leaving. This turn out to be good in the end when a thermal detonator crashed through a window into the small house the troops were staying, there was no time the raise the troops, they went quickly in the blast. Blaster fire began to rain down upon him, he used the Force to speed away in the other direction, off toward  his brother and the other Jedi.
Kham-Ryn caught up with the outfit quickly, having used the force. They had gained more men since he had seen them last, a small army to go against the destructive might of the massive Mandalorian legions. He quickly found the man or "Men" in charge to warn them of the Mandalorians approaching their flank. The leaders in question were in fact the ones Kham-Ryn was originally sent to Althir to find, speaking with the leaders Revan; For whom the forces were apply named and Alek his lieutenant, Kham-Ryn quickly discovered that the Council wanted them dead, not because Revan was turning followers to the dark side, but because Revan had defied the council and gone to Althir to take back the planet from the Mandalorians. Revan was no bad guy, the council was; They used Kham-Ryn as an assassin, to kill Revan and keep his defiance a secret. This all made both Kai-El and Kham-Ryn a bit nauseous, this was a grave deceit, the look of vengeance filled Kyle's eyes; If we made it out of this Kai-El would have words with the council. After the meeting the two brothers had a drink together and discussed the impending battle. Sleep came easily to both of them that night.
They rose early with the sun and the rest of the ranks, well rested the brothers ate and readied for battle. They made their way toward the forward position where Revan and Alek were waiting, we would be entering the base trough a massive hole that was blown in the outer wall of the compound by a suicide bomber a day earlier, giving the Mandalorians little time to repair the breach in their defense. That would give us an unprotected entrance in which to enter the base, which was at least sixty men wide, large enough not become bottlenecked and laced with suppressing fire; This gave us a huge advantage since most of the cannons were forward mounted turrets, which were pointed in the opposite direction. Revan and Alek gave a rallying speech, their Valor reaching to each and every one of their men, inspiring them to fight Relentlessly and without fear.
This first wave of troops led the charge into the base, as expected the entire force entered with relative ease, the real issue came in close quarters, Mandalorians were even more ruthless in hand to hand fighting. That's when men began to fall under the mighty blows from the Mandos, bones could be broken on lesser men than these, Mandalorians truly were fearsome. Many of the Revanchists fell to the Mandalorians, the tide was beginning to ill, this was not good; The Mandalorian ground force that had attacked Kham-Ryn were coming over the hill and down the slope towards the open outer wall. Revan and Alek having seen the incoming forces, called for the remaining troops to fall back inside the complex, this however proved helpful with the new forces entering the complex, though it wasn't an issue when the revanchists had entered, the larger Mandalorian force  began to bottleneck giving the Jedi the opportunity to unleash a barrage of force blasts and all other form of power into the mobs. This significantly reduced the remaining Mandalorian ground forces, but still they seemed never ending, wave after wave of enemies slowly thinning the revanchist forces, all seemed to be lost the troops began to fight faster hitting harder, the Jedi were using their valor to fuel one another. The battle became intense bodies on both sides were beginning to fall faster, a Mandalorian juggernaut fired a grenade into a small group revanchists raining debris down onto the battlefield when Republic cruisers appeared in the sky. They loosed a torrent of heavy laser fire to suppress the Mandalorian forces, the Republic Troopships began to released their cargo of troop filled drop-boxes literally crushing the Mandalorian horde. The Republic Elite Troopers cut down the Mandalorian forces with ease, their heavy repeating canons making quick work of the Mandalorian armor.
Victory was theirs, the last of the Mandalorian legions had fallen, Kham-Ryn and Kai-El had waded through the battle and come out alive. This was a sweet victory, we had crushed a Major portion of the Mandalorian army, news would travel fast of the conquering of the Mandalorian forces on Althir. The brothers parted ways with Revan and Alek, who would take a bulk of a republic fleet and disappear into the Unknown Regions, and took up cabins on the Capital Ship back to Coruscant. They were debriefed on board the ship, telling the commander of the events that had unfolded and left to wander the ship for the voyage through hyperspace. Kai-El approached Kham-Ryn in his cabin and, apologized for leaving him the way he had and told his brother about what he was going to say to the council, they slept the rest of the way home , they earned their sleep  this day.             
Upon their arrival to Coruscant they immediately  were greeted by temple guardians and escorted to the High Council chambers sitting high atop the temple. The air was thick within the walls of the council chambers, the metal shutters were drawn which cast a darkness across the room with streams of orange light beaming in from outside through the cracks in the shutters. Kham-Ryn standing next to his brother stepped forward and told the council of the events that had transpired, after which there was a cold dead silence as the eyes of the council members passed back and forth to one another. After what seemed like a lifetime the council spoke, they were not to be exiled for their consorting with a known fugitive of the Jedi order, but instead rewarded for their part in taking down the bulk of the Mandalorian invasion force. They apologized for their deceit and gave no excuses for it, the shutter rose and a warm amber glow bathed the room in light, the council excused them, so Kham-Ryn turned to leave, Kai-El did not.
Kham-Ryn left his brother in the council chambers to lay into the council for their lack of remorse for their actions, the door flew open and Kai-El came out, the door slamming behind him twisting their hinges. They returned to their quarters, Kai-El was brimming with anger, when they reached the room Kai-El told his brother that he would be leaving and going into exile, that he was not to follow, Kham-Ryn sat in silence as he listened to his brother speak. When he was finished the room fell silent, they sat quietly for a moment and then both moved for the door, Kham-Ryn walked his brother to the shuttle platform outside the temple; They said no goodbyes, only that the force was with one another, hugged and then watched his brother enter  the shuttle and zip away leaving Kham-Ryn standing on the platform, alone again; He began to cry.

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Again any criticism is welcomed, It just makes me a better writer.

Hope you enjoyed reading.

EDIT:  Changed all Cam-Ryn to Kham-Ryn
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« Reply #1 on: September 02, 2011, 10:46:10 PM »

Just awsome. well written. Great connection with that time frame. Another great chapter.
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« Reply #2 on: September 02, 2011, 10:51:02 PM »

Just awsome. well written. Great connection with that time frame. Another great chapter.

Thank you Palan, the love feels great. Grin

I was nervous to put it up but, no one here is out to get me. Grin

gimme a day or two and I will have the Third act revised and up.

Thanks again.
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« Reply #3 on: September 02, 2011, 11:10:28 PM »

Can't wait, love the old republic stuff.
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« Reply #4 on: September 02, 2011, 11:24:41 PM »

Can't wait, love the old republic stuff.

I love How big it is I mean there is more stuff written on Things after RTOJ, Anyone can fit their character in and now with TOR game coming out that entire gap of The Cold War is going to be filled by the player.

That was a long sentence lol.
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« Reply #5 on: September 02, 2011, 11:28:20 PM »

I love How big it is I mean there is more stuff written on Things after RTOJ, Anyone can fit their character in and now with TOR game coming out that entire gap of The Cold War is going to be filled by the player.

That was a long sentence lol.

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Thats the best part about it, I wrote one short story in that timeframe about a twi'lek named Mahna Adwila, It fit in really well.
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« Reply #6 on: September 02, 2011, 11:29:06 PM »


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Thats the best part about it, I wrote one short story in that timeframe about a twi'lek named Mahna Adwila, It fit in really well.
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Post it I'll read it.
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« Reply #7 on: September 03, 2011, 04:41:02 AM »

 Grin  very nice well told unlike you guys i never played those games so its new to me lol
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« Reply #8 on: September 03, 2011, 04:45:41 AM »

Grin  very nice well told unlike you guys i never played those games so its new to me lol

Sweet glad to get you into TOR
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« Reply #9 on: September 06, 2011, 03:58:03 PM »

Changed the name to "Path of the Sentinels"
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« Reply #10 on: September 07, 2011, 04:07:26 AM »

 Cool good job nero and kham whens the new chapter comming out? i hope the new name didnt force anything major for ya
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« Reply #11 on: September 07, 2011, 04:11:10 AM »

Cool good job nero and kham whens the new chapter comming out? i hope the new name didnt force anything major for ya

2 Days, I need to re work a couple things. I'll PM u when I post it.

Thanks for the enthusiasm. Grin Grin
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« Reply #12 on: September 14, 2011, 04:45:24 PM »

Just an Update.

I have had some writers block which led to procrastination while waiting for my new sabers.

I'm sure I will be inspired when They arrive today.

More is coming, I haven't forgot. Grin
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« Reply #13 on: September 20, 2011, 03:43:08 PM »

UPDATE:

Writing is very hard Undecided
It has taken a while for me to get back in the swing of things and I'm starting to pick up speed.

Just want to let you all know.

ADMINS: This thread can be edited to remove any of my double posts.
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« Reply #14 on: September 20, 2011, 04:49:52 PM »

Kai-El   sounds like a kryptonian name.  From the house of El.  But of course he is from the house of Kurios
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