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« Reply #45 on: November 29, 2017, 05:05:14 AM »

Good point(s) gentlemen.  Yeah, info dumping exposition during "downtime" was something I was hoping to get across organically.  Now I know better for next time!

Glad you caught that TR  Wink

I guess the lesson of this chapter: you do NOT mess with D'Aylanna  Grin *And no long-winded flashbacks  Wink

Yes we all learn from it, so it’s good you gave it a go.  My take away is probably no flash backs longer than a paragraph or two (unless it is some kind deliberate device like a vision back in time/dream etc.).  Honestly I think the idea was great with the censure for Jorya, I would really have loved to have seen that in a Jorya perspective chapter to capture her feelings and response as it happened, I’ve no doubt you’ll address that at some point though - along with other 'ramifications'
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« Reply #46 on: November 29, 2017, 12:00:04 PM »

Yes we all learn from it, so it’s good you gave it a go.  My take away is probably no flash backs longer than a paragraph or two (unless it is some kind deliberate device like a vision back in time/dream etc.).  Honestly I think the idea was great with the censure for Jorya, I would really have loved to have seen that in a Jorya perspective chapter to capture her feelings and response as it happened, I’ve no doubt you’ll address that at some point though - along with other 'ramifications'
Excellent LSG; and thanks for the perspective^^  Glad that I was able to convey that Jorya's actions--while motivated by selflessness and concern--will have far reaching consequences that she (and hopefully, the reader) can't possibly anticipate.

And...it will hurt.
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« Reply #47 on: November 29, 2017, 03:55:17 PM »

Just read it.  You're sending her to M'Tzigon?  Oy!  I'd better warn the tribes...

I wanted to echo about the flash-backs.  I think it would have worked better as it's own chapter, or it's own segment, if that makes sense?  As LSG and Teagan said, its just a bit much for a flash-back.  But the info inside is ... interesting.

Definitely need to warn the tribes...

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« Reply #48 on: November 29, 2017, 04:26:13 PM »

Just read it.  You're sending her to M'Tzigon?  Oy!  I'd better warn the tribes...

I wanted to echo about the flash-backs.  I think it would have worked better as it's own chapter, or it's own segment, if that makes sense?  As LSG and Teagan said, its just a bit much for a flash-back.  But the info inside is ... interesting.

Definitely need to warn the tribes...


So, general consensus: no long flash-backs  Wink

Makes absolute sense Karm^^  Again, that's why I am glad for the feedback  Smiley

And about the tribes... Ooops!  Don't want to give anything away  Cheesy
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« Reply #49 on: December 01, 2017, 08:56:44 PM »

Before we begin, I feel that I have to give LSG some credit for this chapter as well.  He sent me some incredible snippets pertaining to the easter eggs and I KNEW that I HAD to included them.  SO: Chapter 9 is dedicated to LSG  Smiley

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Chapter 9: Frustrations

SEARCH PARAMETERS NOT FOUND.  INQUIRY?

For what seemed like the hundredth time, my enquiries had come up with nothing.  Frustrated, I ran my left hand through my short hair.  Dammit.  This was getting me nowhere fast.  Closing my eyes, I rubbed my temples as I considered my next step.  And promptly came up with nothing.

Shakal, sometimes you need to step away from a problem to gain perspective. I heard D’Aylanna’s voice in my head.  And she was right.  I’d been trying to force intuition.  Well…I did tell the women that I’d check out the Gardens.  

Rising slowly from the terminal, I made myself relax while I closed my eyes and, going through a mental Force technique, I felt the tightness in my head begin to dissipate.  Breathe.  Balance.

I opened my eyes again and, in no hurry, began strolling through the Archives and entered the adjoining Hall of Annuls.  Clearly the University of Bar’leth had gone through great trouble (and no small amount of funds) to acquire some truly spectacular exhibits.  The disparate exhibitions were often displayed in enormous menageries, often drawing large crowds consisting of tourists, students, and hobbyists.

Soon, I began to not only feel better but to truly enjoy myself.  I came across a geology presentation where I engaged the professors in a full-blown discussion about rock mass plasticity.  Smiling, I could almost hear the collective groans of the students in the small crowd but…I had the proverbial rancor by the bit.  Before I knew it, I’d begun typing some constitutive equations and relationships with the instructors.  And while they would sometimes correct a mistake that I’d made, I was able to hold my own considering.

After some time had passed, I shook hands with the Fellow’s Panel and made my farewells.  Distractedly walking away, I smiled at the time I’d spent with the geotechnical engineers, thinking of how my life could have been drastically different if I had chosen an…easier path in life.  Would I trade what I had now?  Not for a Hutt’s weight in credits.  But…it was amusing to reminisce.

Suddenly, I was rudely interrupted out of my contemplations by a grandstanding Toydarian docent.

“And now, for the first time in this sector, the University of Bar’leth is proud to present…the Wilhuff Tarkin Collection!  This incredible assortment of verified personal affects from the infamous Grand Moff is as macabre as it is extraordinary!”

Looking past the oily Toydarian as he hovered, I saw a hermetically sealed transparisteel case surrounding various items.  Admittedly, they all looked rather mundane: a uniform with the rank placard “belonging” to Tarkin, an “official” registry of Tarkin’s appointment (“By the Emperor himself!”) to the Imperial Special Weapons Group, a large doonium consignment to Project Stardust that Tarkin had confirmed via his thumbprint-ident, a sheaf of papers fanned out on table…

I abruptly stopped, turning the volume down on the Toydarian’s assertions.  Paper itself was anachronistic and almost gauche in its use, given the virtually unlimited storage capacities of datanodes.  What was any of it doing here in such a display?  I bent my head closer to get a better look, using my cybernetic eye to discern the fine details.

Amazed, I saw that these papers had the Authentication Ident-Scans of the Imperial Grand Admiralty.  And printed below the various names of military functionaries (Tarkin’s was the first) was a simple communiqué concerning the Death Star:

“THE FOLLOWING PLANETS HAVE BEEN DETERMINED AS DEMONSTRATING CONCLUSIVE ANTIPATHY AGAINST THE EMPIRE.  LIQUIDATION WITH EXTREME PREJUDICE IS AUTHORIZED VIA DS-1, ORBITAL BATTLE STATION.  LONG LIVE THE EMPEROR.”

   BOTHAWUI PRIME (GOLM)
   CHANDRILA
   CORELLIA
   KASHYYYK
   MON CALAMARI
   RYLOTH


Bile in the back of my throat began to rise.  I was disgusted: such a strange thing to see the death of worlds listed so…bureaucratically.  Such banality…like a checklist…

Something caught my eye.  I noticed a detail that I’d missed before: handwritten below the list of printed planets in neat, flowing Nabooian script—Nabooian script…Palpatine—was a single word.

Aethas.

Aethas.  I’d heard that before…but…where?  Opening myself to the Force, I went through a mental recall technique…

The Night Sister’s face looked amused.  “What could that be?  Some myth come true?  That the Jacipri Creation story is factual?  Perhaps Uhanayih really is the Yinchorri ‘Within World’ that their religion tells them?  Or how about that the Aethans were real and are coming back to life to immolate all of the ‘imperfect Jedi?’”

My stomach suddenly sank… Two references to the same obscure myth?!  And in such a short time… Whatever it portended, I knew that it couldn’t be good… But, it got me thinking.  Perhaps…

Hurriedly, I returned to the Archives and, sitting at a terminal, typed in the enquiry field:

SEARCH: “AETHAS BLACK STONE”

Within a split-second, the monitor greeted me with this:

FOUND: 17 FICTION ENTRIES.  INQUIRY?

“Dammit!”  Embarrassedly, I apologized to the three other patrons around me that heard my expletive.  One and all, they gave me pointed looks.  

SEARCH: “NON-FICTION{TANGENTIAL/AETHAS BLACK STONE}”

This time the results were more in line with what I’d expected: a…rumor, of sorts.  Within the database, the last known reference of the black stone was from over 500 years ago.  As I read, I felt the hairs on the back of my neck stand up.  Sporadic and convoluted information—and, often times, unreliable and contradictory—but what I gleaned from the database consisted of an Old Republic expedition.  There were no particulars listed but the entire project had been abandoned, all media surrounding the event redacted if not outright destroyed.  There were only two excerpts that agreed on one thing: in the wake of the debacle, the various miners associated with the precursors “…exhibited unusual behaviors upon their return…” that was attributed to “…some kind of space sickness caused by ‘extreme gravitational effects.’”

I sat back in my chair.  A mystery to be solved?  More like “more questions raised.”  Inadvertently, I sighed and mentally shrugged.  I just hoped that either D’Aylanna or Jorya were having better luck than I was.

            <<<<< >>>>>

“Save the Cartusion whales!  After the Clone Wars, they were hunted mercilessly for their bones so the evil jedi could inlay them in their lightsabers!  Save the Cartusion whales…!”

The skinny Lorrdian kept repeating the same thing, over and over.  Try as I might, I was beginning to get annoyed… I’d struck out at ExtraCurriculars; they told me there was no “Doctor Aphra” on the staff roster but “suggested I check out ‘Adjunct Studies.’”  But, as far as the Lorrdian, Father had told me to ignore people who had a “tenuous relationship with the truth.”  Even as I went to go around him, he stepped in front of me deliberately.

“Save the Cartusion whales!  Aren’t you against the genocide of these gentle creatures?  Can’t you give of yourself something just so that an innocent can live?”  I was trying to be patient, and told him politely but resolutely “No, thank you” but he just wouldn’t relent.  Then, he made a mistake.  Grabbing my upper arm as I went past him, he attempted to pull me back.

Like Mother had trained me to do, I grabbed his wrist at the pressure point.  Pivoting slightly, I kept an iron grip while forcing his hand in a position that…it should not have gone.  Suddenly, his voice was higher than mine.

“No.  Thank.  You.”  I smiled while looking directly in his eyes and twisted his wrist a bit more.  “My Father doesn’t like for me to join strange organizations that have no Imperial approval.  I’m sure he’d like to meet you.  He arm-wrestles wookies for fun.”  He went on his tip-toes as I turned his wrist a bit more.  “And he taught me all that he knows.”  His forehead was sweating profusely while I used my sweetest voice.  “May the Maker look upon you favorably.”

As soon as I released him, he smiled sickly and ran away.  I couldn’t help but grin as I continued along the quad to Adjunct Studies.  I went into the main building, looking for one of the “friendly” staff to help me out.  As it turned out, the “staff” was a Civils/faculty droid.

“Hello student!  How may I be of service?” I couldn’t help but smile at the thought that, if our roles were reversed, Mother would have probably used her lightsaber as an answer by now.

Coughing quietly, I asked, “Yes, please.  Can you direct me to Doctor Aphra’s office?”

The droid made an odd noise.  “There is no ‘Doctor Aphra’ employed here.”

I was stunned.  But…how…the Night Sister… I tried again.  “Well…was there ever a Doctor Aphra that worked here?”  I was hopeful.

But again, the droid made the same noise.  “There was no ‘Doctor Aphra’ employed here.  Ever.”  The finality of the droid’s speech was anything but subtle.  Was it all for nothing?!  My censure…Mother and Father’s anger…

“You know…I hate to see a pretty lady frown.” A voice came from behind me.  Turning, I saw that it belonged to a tall, lean lavender skinned Sephi.  He had deep black eyes almost like Mother’s…and he was gorgeous.  “Maybe…I can help?”

Still, I had a job to do.  “OK.  Yes, you can tell me if there was ever a Doctor Aphra that worked here.”  His blond hair looked as fine as silk.

“Sorry, pretty lady.  Like ‘bucket-head’ said: no Doc Aphra ever worked here.”

I felt poleaxed.  But…by the Maker he looked beautiful. Focus!  “Oh.  Well…thanks anyw—”

“Oh no, pretty lady,” he interrupted, “you don’t get it.  Doc Aphra didn’t work here.  But I know of Doctor Chelli Aphra—”

My astonishment must have shown on my face.  The Sephi’s smile deepened and, when next he talked, his eyes went to the floor.  “—but you’ve got to pay for it.”  He looked right into my eyes, no longer coy.

Now I was—slightly—annoyed.  By the Maker…now what?!  Exasperated, I said, “And what’s your price?”

“Simple, pretty lady.  I have to have your name.”  His smile was playful; he was good looking and he knew it.  Not that that was necessarily a bad thing…

My face showed none of that though.  “My name?  That’s it?”  My incredulous tone was unmistakable.  He’s still beautiful…

“That’s it pretty lady.”  He gave a creative flourish.  “…Well, and the pleasure of your company for dinner.  Your choice where we eat.”  His smile displayed his perfect lips.

I was thankful to both Mother and Father.  My education had been more than just saber combat, polymathy, and the Force.  Mother in particular had schooled me.  Very, very well.

Still…he was beautiful.

“OK.” I heard myself agree.  “My name.  And dinner.”  Elegantly, he nodded and smiled.  OK then.  “Jorya.”  But where…?  “And…I have to admit, I don’t know of any good restaurants around here.”

“Jorya.”  He said my name as delicately as if he were holding a Hapan crystal goblet.  “Well, I happen to know of several good bistros.  But first: you’ve held up your end; it’s only gentlemanly of me to do likewise.  Doctor Chelli Aphra didn’t work here; she got her doctorate here from Bar’ ‘U.’”

I waited for him to continue.  When he didn’t, I went to leave, speaking tersely, “OK.  Well thank you…”  And then I realized that I didn’t even know his name.

“Strileth Jantsk, pretty lady Jorya.”  He put his hand up, carefully…as if he were afraid that he’d scare me.  I almost laughed at that.  “Please, don’t go.  I have an ulterior motive for asking you to dinner: so that I could give you more information on Doc Aphra…in the hopes that it would ensure me a second date.”  His smile was open, forthcoming.

And, admittedly, I probed him with the Force.  Incredibly…he was being truthful.  

I must have been quiet awhile because he hastily added, “Sorry, I wasn’t trying to be presumptuous…”  I started laughing.  The look on his face was priceless.

“I’m sorry Strileth; I…I’m not laughing at you.  You’re just so…honest.”  I hadn’t smiled like this in a long time.

“Um…thanks?” His small grin began to grow bigger.  “…Does that mean ‘yes?’”

I couldn’t help myself.  “Yes.  For the first dinner…for the second?  Well…that just depends on what you can tell me about Doctor Aphra.  Let me have your comm-number; I’ll ping you in a little bit.”  Such a handsome smile…

“And Jorya,” the Sephi’s voice sounded amused, “Please call me, ‘Stril.’  Only my parents call me ‘Strileth.’”  His dark eyes reflected his easy smile.

“OK.  Stril.”  And as I walked away, I looked back over my shoulder.  He was still watching me.  So beautiful… Shaking my head, I headed to the Gardens to meet Mother and Father.

            <<<<< >>>>>

D’Aylanna and I were waiting for Jorya in the Gardens when she found us.  In a flurry of explanation, she told us of her encounter—and her luck—concerning Doctor Aphra.  I had to admit that I was less than enthused regarding the particulars.  Still…it warmed my heart to see Jorya in such spirits.

“…So can I, Mom?  Dad?”  Jorya reminded me that she was still a young woman, regardless of recent events and responsibilities.  Or, perhaps because of them.  Looking at D’Aylanna, I saw that she agreed with our unspoken consent.

“Yes, Jorya.  You may.”  I trusted her and knew that she had a level head on her shoulders.  Well…most times.

“Thanks Mom!  Dad!”  She emphasized each with a kiss to our cheeks and ran off.  Out of the corner of my eye, I saw D’Aylanna shake her head, an amused set to her lips.

“Were we ever that young?” Her rhetorical question caught me as I was also waxing nostalgic.  She looked up into my eyes, fondly remembering.  “Seems so long ago…”

“Perhaps…but you still look as young as the day I met you, Ereneda.”  My wife smiled one of her rare smiles, saying nothing.  Tenderly, D’Aylanna took my arm and we began to amble through the Gardens, her head leaning upon my upper arm.  And, for a time, I was able to think of other things.   But it was all too brief.

Ereneda, I need to talk to you about something: the dagger that I found in the Canticum Lowlands among the witch’s paraphenelia.  But not here and not without Jorya.  Let’s head inside…”

            <<<<< >>>>>

We were halfway down the long, wide oval cargo corridor, naked industrial steel rusted and greasy with age.  I stopped dead, my hand moving swiftly to block Jorya from going any further…

“What’s wrong?” she asked.

At the other end of the corridor the cargo lift was approaching…an untameable tide of primal power rising with it.

I stared wide-eyed at what I felt, a glance at D’Aylanna revealed a frantic expression.  I turned to Jorya.  “Run Dear One, run and do not stop.”

Confusion and disappointment etched across her features as the tide rose higher.  “Run, what…from what?”

“She’s too inexperienced; she can’t even sense it!  RUN JORYA!”  D’Aylanna screamed igniting her sabre.

Jorya searched our faces for some hint but saw only the naked fear, realizing this was no time to argue.  She turned and ran back the way we had come.

The tide was nearly upon us, the early breaks flicked sprays of raw power even at this distance.

The lift doors started to open.

“It can’t be…” D’Aylanna whispered.

I ignited both my sabres and strengthened my stance to hold back the ocean.

“Shakal…” D’Aylanna said quietly as the figure appeared between the parting doors, a human figure clad in light-eating midnight armour…a sword black as death in one hand, a rifle accented with thin lines of blood red metal in the other.  

He moved with speed that was not possible for a Jedi or machine.  And from that point onward I knew my life would be measured in seconds…

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I woke drenched in sweat breathing heavily…it had been too real… I called upon the Force to calm myself, collect myself.  It took me a moment but slowly realization began to take hold.  Reaching out with my right hand, I felt D’Aylanna’s sleeping body beside me.  Jorya was also a comforting presence in the Force, asleep in her adjacent room.  Settling down, I prepared to drift back into sleep when something amiss caught my eye.

Across the room lay the black knife…I was sure I had placed it in a sheath.  Yet there it sat at the front of my gear…slowly leaching my dissipating fear…
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« Reply #50 on: December 02, 2017, 05:00:00 AM »

Not just included improved!! 17 fiction results...genius...
Anyway Stril....turns up very conveniently doesn't he...he may well speak the truth...but we all know the best lies use the truth...sound very witty and urbane...like someone who was recently introduced in Wind Chimes...
Maybe i'm paranoid...
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« Reply #51 on: December 02, 2017, 01:45:15 PM »

Not just included improved!! 17 fiction results...genius...
Anyway Stril....turns up very conveniently doesn't he...he may well speak the truth...but we all know the best lies use the truth...sound very witty and urbane...like someone who was recently introduced in Wind Chimes...
Maybe i'm paranoid...
Thank you LSG!  I was hoping to do "right" by you after the great ideas you'd provided  Smiley

We'll be seeing a lot more of Strip...starting with the next chapter!

And you bring up a good point: this collaboration with Karm and the tandem stories with his excellent Wind Chimes makes me (in my opinion) want to really up my game.  Put simply: you guys help make me write better. To wit: these easter eggs really are enjoyable, not only as a narrative device, but also trying to incorporate them naturally into the story.  And sometimes, I completely rewrite a section to include a given easter egg and the overall story improves.  So, thank you (again) guys for being open to this shared continuity!  I--quite literally--would never have wrote Shadow Etude without Karm's openness and suggestion to do so  Smiley

Oh and there's an Interlude forthcoming that will tie into this.  Soon  Wink
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« Reply #52 on: December 04, 2017, 04:13:16 PM »

Nicely done, Dutchman!  I like the Stril character.  He's ... mysterious.  As LSG said, convenient timing ... and honesty does not preclude malevolent intent.  :-)  On the other hand... 

And the knife, the tie-in back to the Aethans...  These Aethans are taking over EVERYTHING!!!!!!!  ;-)
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« Reply #53 on: December 04, 2017, 10:53:26 PM »

As LSG said, convenient timing ... and honesty does not preclude malevolent intent.
Wow are you guys paranoid!








...or are you?

Kind of hard to say but VERY true Karm^^
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« Reply #54 on: December 08, 2017, 01:04:51 AM »

Chapter 10: Guess Who’s Coming to Dinner

“Please, Father!” Jorya pleaded, her youthful exuberance shining through.

Sighing, I relented.  “OK Dear One.  I’ll meet this…‘Stril.’  But I still want to know why he knows so much about Doctor Aphra.”

Her eyes gleaming, Jorya’s face lightened the mood.  “Oh Father, you’re so suspicious!”  Suddenly her face turned bashful.  “…Besides, I…kind of did a Force probe on him.”

Momentarily taken aback, I asked, “You.  Did.  What?”  Inside, I almost…laughed.  Good girl.

Her face became serious.  “Father.  I would not just go to dinner with someone I just met without some…assurances.”

“Yes, Shakal, how could you possibly think that our daughter could do something like that?  So…impulsive?”  Pointedly, D’Aylanna stared daggers straight at Jorya.  Sensing her Mother’s meaning, Jorya promptly looked sheepish.

Covering my mouth with my cybernetic hand, I hid the smile that played upon my lips.  Looking from D’Aylanna to Jorya and back again, I tried—unsuccessfully—to stop my laughter.  As soon as I did, D’Aylanna joined me and Jorya soon followed suit.

Catching a breath, I sobered up.  “Yes, Dear One.  Bring…Stril along for an early dinner.  I would like to…‘talk’ with him.”

“As would I.” D’Aylanna looked deadly serious.  And I couldn’t help but laugh again.

            <<<<< >>>>>

When D’Aylanna took Jorya to go shopping for a new dress, I took the opportunity to study the black stone dagger, this time via the Force.  Sitting on the couch of our rented quarters, I had the knife in the middle of the table in front of me.  Even during the day, the black stone…seemed to suck in the light.  To work…

As I began to delve the weapon, it seemed at first that nothing was happening.  Sitting back, I discontinued my mental probe.  Or rather, I thought that I had.  Instead, the dagger kept…absorbing Force energies.  Even seconds after, I could feel residual energy being drawn.  Incredible.  

When D’Aylanna and Jorya returned almost an hour later, I was still no closer to understanding the nature of the dagger’s composition.  But the time had not been completely wasted.  Out of the corner of my eye, I saw both women enter the room.  Even distracted, I noticed that Jorya had chosen a fitted sheath dress.  And matching heels.  With them, she was almost as tall as I was.  Suppressing a smile, I complimented her on her choice of attire.  

“Yes, Shakal.  Our daughter clearly takes after me.”  It hadn’t escaped my notice that D’Aylanna had also found several new outfits.  I had to smile; D’Aylanna had once told me that a woman’s clothes were much like armor, depending on the situation.  Well, who was I to argue?

Turning serious, I thought of the problem at hand, namely: the whereabouts of Doctor Aphra.  According to Jorya, this “Stril” would be able to help us.  Feeling D’Aylanna’s hand upon my shoulder, she nuzzled close to me, whispering, “Give them both a chance.”

Quietly I laughed.  “How do you do that, Ereneda?”  I enfolded her in my arms, her small frame virtually disappearing as I hugged her.  Kissing her midnight-blue hair, I told her, “I promise to give ‘them’ a chance.”  Jorya I trusted so at least that part of my promise I knew that I would keep…

            <<<<< >>>>>

“Mother, Father.  May I present Stril Jantsk.”  Jorya’s faced beamed.  I could see why.  The lavender-skinned Sephi who shook my hand was taller than me, slender, and handsome.  Taking my right hand, he had a firm handshake.  When he came to D’Aylanna, he kissed her extended hand.

“Mr. Vih’Torr, Mrs. Vih’Torr.”  He had an easy smile.  “I can see where Jorya gets her good looks from.  It is customary that one invited to dinner bring something suitable to the hosts.”  He handed D’Aylanna an oblong package, neatly wrapped with a bow.  I had to admit that the attention to detail was astonishing.  “Mrs. Vih’Torr, I sincerely hope that this is to your liking.”

A ghost of a wry smile upon her face, D’Aylanna opened the package.  “Ah.  Hapan Pogram-Blood wine.  And a good year, too.  Thank you, Stril.”  Turning her head so that neither Jorya nor Stril could see, my wife looked into my eyes pointedly.  “Shakal.  A chance.”  The last two were under her breath so that only I could hear.  Sighing, I fixed a smile upon my face.

“Welcome, Stril.  Jorya tells me that you’re attending the University of Bar’leth.  What field?”  I offered him a chair around the dining table.

“Thank you, sir.  I am dual-majoring in archaeology and biogeochemistry, with a focus on geology…”

            <<<<< >>>>>

As the afternoon progressed, Stril continued to regale us with his past.  He’d grown up on Thustra, the Sephi homeworld in a middle-class family of droid engineers.  Showing incredible aptitude, he was able to secure a full scholarship to Bar’leth as part of the Archaeological Society, where he was now doing his post-graduate work.  He was attentive to both Jorya and D’Aylanna, respectful to D’Aylanna and myself.  Articulate and self-assured, he was both deferential and yet assertive.

I detested him immediately.

But, by the look that Jorya had on her face, I knew that I would have to put my distaste aside for my daughter’s sake.  And—if D’Aylanna’s good mood was an indicator—for my wife’s as well.  No Shakal, for your own sake, a voice in my head that sounded eerily like D’Aylanna’s corrected me.  Grinning dryly, I was inclined to agree.  Sighing, I continued throughout the evening without saying much.

But once Stril began talking about Doctor Aphra, I sat up straighter, my full attention on what the Sephi was saying.

“…and in my Archaeology classes, we learned about Doc—that is, Doctor Aphra.  She had been appointed to Imperial Civilworks by Darth Vader himself, under direction of the Emperor.”  He let that sink in, as if we should be impressed.  I feigned fascination.  “But she ended up on the wrong side of Vader’s graces and he ended up spacing her.”  Now, this was something…different.  The Sephi made a grand gesture.  “However, Doc Aphra was saved by her partner, a wookie called Black Krrsantan.  And together, they facilitated the Great Auction of the Rur crystal.”  Now my mind was lazer-focused.

“Rur crystal?  Was it…a type of kyber?” I asked, in a non-chalant voice.

“Sorry, Mr. Vih’Torr, but only Doc Aphra knew for sure.”  Of course, you kriffing… “…But, she must have sold it for a good price.  She retired at the Cosmatanic Steppes in the Outer Rim.”  He smiled toothily.

“How very…industrious of you.  Stril.”  I stared straight at him, into the back of his skull.  Not without some satisfaction, I saw him swallow, a drop of sweat slowly rolling down his forehead.  “And why would you have this information?”  His smile turned sickly.

“Well…that is, Mr. Vih’Torr, I…ah, wanted to get a second date from Jorya.  That is, sir.”  I didn’t blink, both my hazel eyes boring into his dark ones.  To his credit, he didn’t look away.  Even when I mentally “turned off” the social veneer of my cybernetic eye, exposing the biomechanics, he did not look elsewhere (but a couple more drops of sweat began to appear).  Honest mistake.

I felt D’Aylanna’s hand squeeze mine in mild annoyance.  Sighing, I broke eye contact.  “Well, I have to congratulate you, young man.  My daughter has a good head on her shoulders.  And if she sees…something within you, then I trust her implicitly.”  Mostly.  “Stril.  Why don’t you and I have a drink on the veranda.”

Before I could exit, Jorya appeared in front of me.  “Fa…Dad.”  Damn.  “Please don’t…scare him.  Please?”  Looking up into my eyes, I saw the girl that I’d saved all those years ago.  And relented; how could I say no?

As I turned, I saw D’Aylanna looking up at me, a look of pride on her face.  “Shakal.  You are a good man.”  Standing on her tip-toes, she kissed me lingeringly with her blue lips.  She then went to join Jorya in the atrium garden.  Well…that’s one way to win an argument.

Walking out onto the balcony, I saw that Stril had his back to the door.  Well, he’s no warrior… I wasn’t sure if that changed my opinion of him more or less.  Still…I did owe it to Jorya.  And D’Aylanna.

Walking forward, I assumed a pleasant look on my face before he turned to see the change…

            <<<<< >>>>>

Even as I entered the corridor, I could feel the inexorable tide threatening to inundate me.  Pounding against my very being, the power of the primal force was almost a physical blow, a tripartite beat that reverberated through the ferrocrete walls, the transparisteel windows, and my exposed soul.

Turning behind in order to be heard over the roar, I saw both Jorya and D’Aylanna with almost mirror-like looks of terror upon their faces.  They’d both ignited their sabers.

Ereneda!  Dear One! RUN!!”  But even as the words left my lips, I knew that I was too late.

And I saw…it…reflected in the watery pools of both their eyes, their faces falling from a terror so intense that sanity no longer seemed possible.

I ignited both of my lightsabers, the snap-hiss drown out by the inhumane howl that was a gale-force hurricane upon my back.  Jorya fell to her knees, both of her hands pressed against her mouth hard as she attempted—in vain—to stop her screams.  D’Aylanna—miraculously—took a step forward to stand by me, her face turned to one side as if to stave off a blinding light or excessive heat and fighting the agony of doing so.  She had tears streaming down her face but—unbelievably—she took another step, to stand right next to me.

And I.  I finally turn knowing—knowing—that what remains of my rational mind will wither before the raging storm.  That my life had been forfeit the very moment that the power had been delivered unto my presence.

And a scene wrenched from the bowels of the abyss assaulted my eyes, scorching my senses, flaying my soul.  A figure clad in midnight black armour loomed menacing, the light dimming as if a star was eclipsed or a life was taken.

Screaming, defiant, terrified, reckless, I adopt an aggressive posture, knowing that there was no effective defense against that which was unstoppable.  Beside me, my wife stood next to me, with me, screaming in solidarity, screaming in horror; both of us a shield in front of Jorya.

Drawing a sword the shade of the blackest night, the onrushing tempest intensified, the report of a sonic boom crashed into us, through us, and past.  And before my eyes had even registered movement, I knew that the figure was in front of me, his sword stabbing into my chest, ripping my still-beating heart out through my spine…

            <<<<< >>>>>

Waking in panic, drenched in sweat, my lungs gulp in deep breaths of air, my heart hammering through my sternum.  This time my eyes affix immediately onto the black dagger, naked and pulsing…if shadows could be said to do so.  What little ambient light there is in the room is drawn and absorbed by the dagger…as is my waning fear.  And I know—know—that it is the dagger that is leeching it from me.

Rising from the bed, the temperate air felt chill against my bare, hairy chest.  And just before my hand touched the knife, I stopped mere centimeters from the smooth surface.  This time, I was certain that I’d sheathed the weapon, placing it in my kit.  Steeling my resolve, I picked up the dagger, anticipating…something.

Nothing.  Even after a minute had passed and I’d expectantly waited for the ground below to open, rending and swallowing me…absolutely nothing happened.

Actually…that was not true.  My fear was no more.  Not gone; non-existant.  Slowly turning the dagger in my hands, I wondered what that portended.  And a thought skirted across my mind: if this could affect me…could it be…made to affect others?  I introspectively gnawed on that question until Bar’leth’s sun banished the night, waking both of the women in the household, where they found me staring off the veranda, slowly twirling the knife in my hand.

            <<<<< >>>>>

As the Hapan Infiltrator ascended through the atmosphere, the occupants of Fenris’ Dirge felt a sense of purpose, and one of renewal.  Body, mind, and spirit had been healed, restored.  A general sense of optimism had returned despite the incidents surrounding the black stone dagger.

And when Fenris’ Dirge left the spacelane, entering hyperspace in a flash of pseudomotion, no one noticed that the nondescript ship that had tailed them from a distance soon followed, its destination the same as those aboard the Hapan ship: Cosmatanic Steppes.
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« Reply #55 on: December 08, 2017, 04:46:49 PM »

oh, another mystery!  Rur Crystal?  Somehow I just can't think that his is a good thing...

Nicely written!  i love the way we suddenly rip from the quiet domestic scene and fall back into the vision/nightmare of the dagger. 
I don't know what's waiting for them, but I certainly hope they're ready for it!

I can't wait for more!  Well done!

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« Reply #56 on: December 11, 2017, 03:24:02 AM »

Recurring nightmares, not a good sign.  Perhaps Stril is genuine in his intentions...completely honest after all D'Alyanna and Zearic wouldn't be fooled if he blatantly lied to them...he could be completely on the level...but still someone else's pawn...curious little bit when he notices Stril with his back to the door and thinks he's not a warrior...
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« Reply #57 on: December 11, 2017, 03:39:59 PM »

Recurring nightmares, not a good sign.  Perhaps Stril is genuine in his intentions...completely honest after all D'Alyanna and Zearic wouldn't be fooled if he blatantly lied to them...he could be completely on the level...but still someone else's pawn...curious little bit when he notices Stril with his back to the door and thinks he's not a warrior...

Yes, I thought that was interesting as well.  I'm still chewing on that one, trying to decide if its a red herring or something Stril is hiding...  LOL
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« Reply #58 on: December 12, 2017, 05:33:06 PM »

Chapter 11:  Bad News

“…No, I understand Koawan Telow’na.  No; thank you again for the update.  Please extend our best to Master Karmack and Lady Arnor at Endor.  Fenris’ Dirge out.”

D’Aylanna’s troubled expression had turned her blue lips into a thin line.  Turning, her dark eyes looked right into my hazel.  “…Shakal…”

I stepped forward, enveloping my wife’s small body in a hug, her face pressed against my chest.  “I know, Ereneda.  We’ll deal with it…”  Jennira’s escape was bad enough and the loss of four Gray Jedi was a tragedy but the exact details as to how it had been done… “Interdicted” Koawan Telow’na had said.  She had been very…deliberate in her choice of words.  How the hell did the Imperials…?

My wife was the strongest person I knew but I could tell that she was legitimately concerned.  And looking above her head at Jorya… She looked truly terrified.  Our daughter had reason to be worried, if Jorya’s description regarding her experience during her Delve was any indicator to go by…

“Look…we can’t do anything about that right now.”  I looked at Jorya and then down at my wife.  “We mourn our compatriots and allies.  But we still have a job to do.  And right now, we’ve got to find Doctor Aphra.  With luck, we can find out more about the crystal of Rur; perhaps who purchased it…”  I fell silent.  Breathe.  Balance.  “Thanks to Stril, we have our lead.  Karm and Arnor are counting on us; we will not let them down.”

I hoped that my words had buoyed my wife and daughter.  They certainly hadn’t done anything to alleviate my own anxiety.  But I let none of that show.  “Let’s get ready.”

            <<<<< >>>>>

The Cosmatanic Steppes was a geological oddity.  Located in the Outer Rim, the gas giant that the Steppes occupied was unnamed but suspended above the gaseous core, a large continent of grasslands lay atop the incomplete mantle.  It was a haven for archaeologists, geologists, bio-astronomers, and scientists the galaxy throughout.  During the Historical Art Rush, it’s population had millupled, that is, had increased 1,000-fold.  This had created a fantastically outrageous economy, mostly based on “futures” and “unique” exhibits.  Consequently, the Steppes also had become home to a wealthy elite, effete and with a marked propensity for sloth.

Walking through one of the countless bazaars, we three had on our robes, hoods up to shade us against the trinary-star daylight that beat down upon the Steppes during the day.  After having done some reconnoitering, we’d gathered intel regarding the doctor: apparently, she had “retired” here in the Steppes.  Unfortunately, that meant that she was now a member of said elite…and it was in that economic strata that a ruthless social war was facilitated.  And—according to rumor—Doctor Aphra had been “captured” and was to be “ransomed.”  And, despite even D’Aylanna’s mental abilities, we were unable to glean just what that entailed…

Making our way ever inward, the Steppes were designed in a series of concentric circles, the further inward and upward one went, the richer the tenants.  Our target was located in an enormous manse near the center of the city.  As we made our way closer to the center, we also noticed that there were many, many more security guards. 

Finally, we’d made it to the closest level just under Aphra’s manse.  After we’d walked around it—twice—I was at a loss as how to proceed.  D’Aylanna and I put our heads together while we quietly discussed how best to continue.  It was then that I felt Jorya’s hand upon my back.

“Father?  I…think I know what this is.”  My wife and I had identical looks of expectation.  She continued, looking somewhat diffident, “…when I was talking to Stril, he was telling me that the ‘upper-class simpletons’ of the Steppes had these…games.”  She grinned in remembrance.  “And the games usually constituted some form of…humiliation.”  I could tell that she was still thinking of Stril.

“OK, Dear One.  So…what are we to do now?”  Looking around, I saw no one in the vicinity.

Jorya’s eyes narrowed.  Her keen eyesight was far superior to mine.  Slowly she scanned the façade of the clustered buildings.  And abruptly stopped.  “There, Father.”  She pointed at…nothing.  At least, nothing that I could immediately see.  The nondescript architecture was absolutely alike every other one on the level: brown-gray ferrocrete.  When I continued to look at her disbelievingly, she sighed, “Sorry, Father, Mother.  This way.”

As we followed our daughter, she came to stand in front of one of the myriad ponds that dotted the landscape, interspersed throughout the manicured lawns.  As it was, I could see no difference and said as much to the Togruta.  “Dear One, remember that you can see much more clearly than I can.”

Jorya grinned.  “No, Father it’s not that.  The answer is in the pond.  Well…more like through the pond.”  Her blue eyes held humor in them.

I stared at the pond.  It was a large, semi-circular, shallow vessel that had a high wall on the far side… I scrutinized the far wall…only now noticing that it did not line up exactly with the surrounding buildings.  “Ah…an optical illusion.”  Confident, I stepped over the low wall and into the pond itself.

To late, I heard Jorya’s warning, “No, Father!”  Having expected the bottom to be the same level of the lawns, I had all my weight forward.  So it was that I fell completely into the pond, the “floor” much lower than the surrounding grounds.  Easily treading water despite my robes, I found the sloping bottom, walking myself to the opposite side.

Meanwhile, both D’Aylanna and Jorya had found “hidden” footsteps where the water merely came to their ankles.  Walking up the stairs on the far side, I was soaking wet while both women were dry and laughing.

“…Well, Shakal I can honestly say that you truly are a Water Warrior now.”  My wife’s mirth was infectious: Jorya laughed openly while I came to see the hilarity of what I imagined was quite a site: a big, bearded man in drenched gray robes.  As rivulets of water ran down my face, I suddenly noticed that we were no longer alone.

Standing further down the hidden tunnel, a bizarrely dressed couple were watching us in obvious enjoyment.  “What did I tell you, Sendal?” said an incredibly fat Herglic as he faced his much slimmer partner.  “I knew that we’d have a good game day!”

The woman—Sendal—was a long-necked Kaminoan that had what passed for a smile on her face.  “You did Tulan, you did…but I still won the wager as only the big human was dunked…”  She looked dubiously at D’Aylanna and Jorya, “…and not the Hapan nor the Togruta.”

The Herglic made a sound accompanied by a loud exhalation from the blowhole on his forehead.  “Double or nothing that they can’t be ransomed.  Given or taken?”  He put out his large, solid looking hand towards the Kaminoan.

Cocking her head, Sendal studied each of us in turn, finally nodding.  “Given.”  She shook hands with the Herglic.

“Taken!” Tulan exclaimed, another loud breath billowed as he shook the Kaminoan’s delicate hand.  He then turned his enormous Cetacean head towards us.  “So…you’re not punters…are you part of the creditholds?”

The Herglic could have been speaking Gungun for all the sense that it made to me.  Thankfully, Jorya seemed able to decipher what he was saying.

“You’d be wrong.  We’re beucoup punters, innit?  So: you won over Sendal.  Double, that.”  She winked at me.  “Triple or nothing to see Doc Aphra.”  She spit in her hand, holding out to Tulan.

The Herglic…smiled.  I think.  “Given!”  His hand engulfed the Togruta’s delicate one.

“Taken!” She pumped his fist twice before releasing.  “One moment,” she said turning from Tulan.  In a softer voice, she gathered D’Aylanna and I and took us aside.  “OK, we’ll need to wager…something…”  As her voice trailed off, she stared at D’Aylanna’s ring, the band that I’d given her for our wedding.  Jorya stood up straight.  “Mother…we’re going to need your ring, please.”

Arching her dark blue eyebrow, my wife slowly took off the band.  As she did so, it glinted in the sunlight, the exotic metal looked smoky from one angle, iridescent from another.  “I trust you, Jorya.  But you must needs explain to me exactly how this helps us.”  She handed our daughter the ring.

Breathing in slowly, Jorya put her head right next to D’Aylanna’s.  “This is going to be our ‘entry fee.’  I mean, it’ll be the wager for our entry.”  My wife’s eyes could have shattered quadranium for how hard they looked.  “This is our only way to get to Doctor Aphra.” She gently reminded.  Nonplussed, D’Aylanna gave a small nod.

Jorya walked back up to Tulan.  “Here.  What’s the contest?”  She dropped the ring into the Herglic’s enormous hand.  As soon as the metal band touched his skin, he made it disappear.  He gave a shrewd and pointed look to Sendal.

“You’re witness.  I won ‘tween us.  Now: the Togruta has ‘taken!’”  Again, his blowhole made a noise, expelling a breath.  He handed Sendal my wife’s ring.

“That she did, that she did.”  The Kaminoan agreed.  “So: contest to begin!”

This time Jorya looked as confused as did D’Aylanna or I.  She shrugged, looking apologetic.  I stepped forward, the water still dripping off of me.  “OK.  What’s the ‘contest?’”

Sendal grinned savagely.  “Oh, since your Togruta has ‘taken,’ it is to Tulan to ‘cide.”  I did not like the sound of that.

Walking past us, he stepped into the shallow side of the deep pool.  “Since you’re already ‘pared for our ‘test, I choose you, ‘uman.”  His enormous finger stabbed at me.  “And the ‘test be…‘Breavebrudder!’”

I stood motionless, having understood almost none of it; D’Aylanna clearly hadn’t either.  But by the look on Jorya’s face…it was not good.  “Um…Father.  He said that the contest is which one can hold his breath the longest.  If you win: you’re now ‘brother’ to Tulan and he’ll speak for us to gain entry.” 

Well, that didn’t necessarily sounds so bad… I said as much but even before I’d finished my sentence, Jorya was shaking her head vehemently.  “No, Father.”  She now had a hint of fear in her voice.  “You don’t understand.  If you come up for air before Tulan or…‘forfeit’ then…Tulan will…‘reave’ you.”  What the hell… Quietly, Jorya stepped forward, her voice dropping to match, “He’ll…eat you, Father.”

I stared at Tulan.  I had no doubt that he could make good on his…threat.  The Herglic must have been almost two and a half meters tall, and weighed almost four times what I did.  But…what other choice did we have?  We were lucky to have gotten this far…

“I accept.”  I spit in my hand and thrust it towards Tulan.  Smiling (?) a toothy grin, his huge hand dwarfed mine.  He had a malevolent set about his face.

As I walked back into the pool, the water quickly came up to my chest as I ventured further.  Tulan was already almost completely submerged, the smile never having left his face.  His blowhole made loud inhalations as he breathed in, oxygenating his body.  I quickly did likewise, simultaneously preparing myself mentally with the Force.

“Begin.”  Tulan stated grandly just before he immersed himself completely.  And just before my eyes went under the water, I saw both D’Aylanna and Jorya with identical looks of apprehension on their faces. 

And then I sank deeply into the water.
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« Reply #59 on: December 12, 2017, 06:38:36 PM »

LOL   OK, I have to admit I did NOT see this one coming at all!  Awesome scene and nicely written!  I might have a word with that daughter of yours, though...  Sometimes, "lightsaber diplomacy" might not be the least-favorable decision...  LOL

So, Zearic...  I know you're a Jedi, but just how long CAN you hold your breath? 

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