Illyiss
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« on: March 10, 2018, 07:51:32 PM » |
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Since this is becoming a thing, I figure I ought to put at least some of my prose here in that capacity. As such, it may not all be specifically SW related, though I will try and keep things that are about things that are about topics that wouldn't be found in SW out. As such, some of it will seem philosophical, or explorations of personal states of mind, and as such, I feel, could have been created by a person living in the SW universe. As well, since they are being referenced and utilized as being such, I hope the mods will allow for the explorations. So, without further preamble;
Thoughts Upon a Frozen Flake
So gently does the snowflake fall Drifting down, from nothing to ground In pale delight, crystals tell tales Though who can yet hear Has the language gone so locked When in the field, a child imagines All the tales, mind unburdened Who can say the youth can't listen That in choosing systems We have given forfeit To widespread options Closed our hearts to tales Spoken as footfalls crunch Streams trickle and rivers roar Yet still who can listen Hear those tales pounding Along the shore?
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Taegin Roan
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« Reply #1 on: March 10, 2018, 08:58:52 PM » |
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Yay, I was hoping you'd do this!
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Lord_S_Gray
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« Reply #2 on: March 10, 2018, 09:14:09 PM » |
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The loss of a sense of mystery in the world as one learns scientific facts and as one gets older posed against the innovative creative mind of a child that could come up with a million stories for that snow flake...or that's what I get out of it...still I like the ending the flake has its own story away from the observer becoming a stream. Awesome poem.
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Surik: "Kreia, what are you—are you a Jedi, a Sith?" Kreia: "Does it matter? Of course it does, such titles allow you to break the galaxy into light and dark, categorize it. Perhaps I am neither, and I hold both as what they are, pieces of a whole."
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Illyiss
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« Reply #3 on: March 10, 2018, 09:16:30 PM » |
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I have a feeling I might get as much enjoyment from the various interpretations as you all at getting the poems.
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Illyiss
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« Reply #4 on: March 10, 2018, 09:20:15 PM » |
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Swirling
Racing
Ramming
Screaming
Demeaning
Berating
Intimidating
Words that race from voices
Deep echoes in my mind
Never my voice
Yet known all the same
My demons
Scratching
Clawing
Biting
Gnawing
Punching
Kicking
Beating
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« Reply #5 on: March 10, 2018, 09:28:42 PM » |
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Illyiss, I'm loving this! :-) Thank you!
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« Reply #6 on: March 10, 2018, 11:22:33 PM » |
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THIS
Fantastic! What wonderful prose to have at hand! Thanks for this Illyiss!
Special thanks to LSG: the man who got the ball rolling!
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Illyiss
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« Reply #7 on: March 19, 2018, 01:03:29 AM » |
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Meditations on Time
Each second Every moment Spaced uneven Yet strong Time experienced From within Beats of heart Defining tempo Meter, time All of experience At a hundred beats Hammer staccato While at a turn Thought and experience Stretch between Calm rests Hard beats An eternity Stretched between Compress and relax So it is to live One beat Until next So too Pulse of stars Rest of space Nebula in urgency Black hole draw in Adrift in life We are each Yet another Untamed galaxy
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Lord_S_Gray
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« Reply #8 on: March 19, 2018, 02:44:05 AM » |
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Nice, the connection between the beats of the heart to the beats of the universe in terms of cosmic phenomena and in underlying concept of the nature of time, like how do you measure the amount of time between moments, is it infinite in some measure, like if you only travel halfway between two points you will never reach the other side.
We are Each/ yet another / untamed galaxy
Wow so much to unpack in that, reminds me of some Indian esoteric concepts of being a universe within our selves, or having universes within ourselves in both a physical and metaphysical sense. You have a way with the simplicity of what you write that is amazing, so few words barely a paragraph if you add it all up...but deep really deep - One of my favorite poets is Byron but he can tend to the verbose at times, the simplicity of this is refreshing -less is more, and in this case less is a galaxy of meaning.
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Surik: "Kreia, what are you—are you a Jedi, a Sith?" Kreia: "Does it matter? Of course it does, such titles allow you to break the galaxy into light and dark, categorize it. Perhaps I am neither, and I hold both as what they are, pieces of a whole."
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Illyiss
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« Reply #9 on: March 19, 2018, 02:53:21 AM » |
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Nice, the connection between the beats of the heart to the beats of the universe in terms of cosmic phenomena and in underlying concept of the nature of time, like how do you measure the amount of time between moments, is it infinite in some measure, like if you only travel halfway between two points you will never reach the other side.
We are Each/ yet another / untamed galaxy
Wow so much to unpack in that, reminds me of some Indian esoteric concepts of being a universe within our selves, or having universes within ourselves in both a physical and metaphysical sense. You have a way with the simplicity of what you write that is amazing, so few words barely a paragraph if you add it all up...but deep really deep - One of my favorite poets is Byron but he can tend to the verbose at times, the simplicity of this is refreshing -less is more, and in this case less is a galaxy of meaning.
Thank you, good sir. And yes, Byron does tend to be long winded, though worth it, when one is in the right mind to chew through. I will admit, there is a lot of microcosm/macrocosm in parts of this, and how time is an arbitrary construct, that recently science has proven that time as we measure it is not always constant. The only true measure we have, as perspective based experience machines, is the beat of our heart, the rhythm of our breath. There is so much that came from this, which admittedly, started with a short mindfulness meditation to calm my nerves.
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« Reply #10 on: March 19, 2018, 05:04:45 AM » |
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Thank you, good sir. And yes, Byron does tend to be long winded, though worth it, when one is in the right mind to chew through. I will admit, there is a lot of microcosm/macrocosm in parts of this, and how time is an arbitrary construct, that recently science has proven that time as we measure it is not always constant. The only true measure we have, as perspective based experience machines, is the beat of our heart, the rhythm of our breath. There is so much that came from this, which admittedly, started with a short mindfulness meditation to calm my nerves.
Indeed, a deep question might be does time exist if there is no organism (carbon based or otherwise) with the capacity to observe it / relies upon a chain of sequential chemical reactions (which is the essence of time in a biological sense)? Micro/MAcrosm comparisons always intrigue me, the can make one feel both indispensable and insignificant all at once.
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Surik: "Kreia, what are you—are you a Jedi, a Sith?" Kreia: "Does it matter? Of course it does, such titles allow you to break the galaxy into light and dark, categorize it. Perhaps I am neither, and I hold both as what they are, pieces of a whole."
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Taegin Roan
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« Reply #11 on: March 19, 2018, 05:55:42 AM » |
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Interesting. Though I love poetry, I very rarely read it (and even rarer write it) but like most art, I thoroughly enjoy it. Also this one touched on something that I have been giving a lot of thought to recently. The concept of Time. I have been in to concepts of late, Time, Reality, Value, etc. I just find something incredibly interesting about the abstract vagueness of them, yet every person thinks they know what they mean. Anyways, stories for a different area. Still, I love that you are keeping these "Works" going. It will be interesting to see if I can work any of them into my own stories.
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« Reply #12 on: March 19, 2018, 03:15:36 PM » |
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Meditations on Time
Each second Every moment Spaced uneven Yet strong Time experienced From within Beats of heart Defining tempo Meter, time All of experience At a hundred beats Hammer staccato While at a turn Thought and experience Stretch between Calm rests Hard beats An eternity Stretched between Compress and relax So it is to live One beat Until next So too Pulse of stars Rest of space Nebula in urgency Black hole draw in Adrift in life We are each Yet another Untamed galaxy
I LOVE this piece; it touches on not only the Soul but also Quantum Physics and brings them together. And not just as Art, but also as a biological function, and a natural phenomenon. Eloquent, simple (but not simplistic), and...I'll say it again: sublime Thank you for sharing this Illyiss!
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« Reply #13 on: March 19, 2018, 10:23:00 PM » |
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Illyiss, I love it. I had to read it over a few times to let it sink in. I'm still not sure I really get it.
But I like it!
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Illyiss
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« Reply #14 on: March 22, 2018, 03:00:20 PM » |
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Now is the world In which we live Where safe applies No longer
Once we thought I am safe That only happens Over there Far away Other places
Now in our homes We question the mail Did we order that Is it safe To open and see
Avoid the right That lane could be Unsafe Is that a wire Or just a stick
Never will the world Be what once was We have joined The rest of Earth Danger came home Safe isn't safe Anymore.
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