PERFECT! I love it!
At least within the setting, it's a perfect explanation.
Thank you. Interesting that the study and application of the principles of Buddhism, which the Jedi Order was heavily based on/influenced by, place the points where they made mistakes and failings in such stark relief.
Back to the combat aspect, I watch the movies and shows, and understand it needs to be showy as a stage presentation. I feel the same of choreographed demonstrations. The frustration comes when I see people who want to train for dueling (or even combat as they think it is, with impact weapons similar enough) with flourishes, wide looping movements, and footwork that puts their backs so long to their opponents... Most defense, in my experience, is done in a rectangle directly in front of you, that is usually at most the width of your shoulders, and from your shoulders to your groin, in terms of your hands as they are on your weapon. As well, body positioning is important. Anything more is opening yourself up, in the vast majority of cases.
Then again, training forms often look quite a bit different from the actual application. Kendo comes to mind immediately. Training, especially early, in the forms, the movements are big, especially some of the cuts. IMHO, to teach, in a static way, the feel of the momentum of the cuts, thrusts, and parries. Yet, when we watch competition matches, especially at the highest levels, not only is the whole match usually very short, with fast and furious movement, it's often all contained in a very close, tight area right in front of (and thus between) the two combatants.