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« Reply #30 on: January 04, 2018, 03:26:05 PM »

LSG, that was amazing!  I've wondered how the Jedi training would meld with the Aethen's native talent.  For Milea to stand up to Jarys like that is quite impressive.  I especially liked the descriptions of the third level of battle - the mental aspect.  It gives me some ideas, actually...   :-)

And that action sequence was AMAZING!  Nicely written, with all the right elements hit to keep us in the action without bogging down or getting to descriptive!  Well done!  I find myself looking forward to the eventual meeting of Jarys and Valens...

Which may come sooner.  Jarys just took down Valens' lover.  The story is going to get back to him.  Which may send him off looking for these Sons of Kessel...

Nicely done sir!  :-)

Dutchman: I agree.  There are folks reading these, but few ever comment.  I hope more do.  I am wondering if it would be inappropriate to post a little "advertisement" over in other forums...  LOL
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« Reply #31 on: January 04, 2018, 08:50:11 PM »

Dutchman: I agree.  There are folks reading these, but few ever comment.  I hope more do.  I am wondering if it would be inappropriate to post a little "advertisement" over in other forums...  LOL

I've considered doing this myself once or twice. Cheesy
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« Reply #32 on: January 08, 2018, 08:44:24 AM »

Chapter 8
Milaea
She was on her knees.  Her master’s body was still and silent as the cavernous hangar around them. 

She was shaking, uncontrollably…a part of her mind told her it was just stress hormones pumping through her, told her to enter a calming trance…only then could she help her master….but her heart told her she needed that strength.

Her skin was tingling.  The lightning had burnt off much of her clothes, they were tattered and still smoking…her skin was unblemished but there were small flickers of purple lightning arcing off it…a part of her mind told her it was the residue of the attack, that is was a manifestation of the dark side….but her heart told her that energy was coming from within her.

Her master was all but dead, burning tears slid across her sweat stained cheeks…Sofa’s chest was crushed, her face shattered…a part of her mind told her now was the time to comfort her in the force, to let her slip back away, to rejoice as she re-joined the source of all life…but her heart knew this wasn’t what she wanted to happen

It told her she could stop this.

She stared at the body before her…she could see the broken lines, twisted and jagged through the shatter-point, where they were cut her masters life energy, her very soul, was leaking out into the force.  A part of her mind told her to let it go…let nature its course…

Her heart didn’t care.

She touched the force gently, lightly, her sorrow, her hope, her fear all taking up different strands of the force like threads of a tattered cloth.   So different from how she had just pulled the force to her whilst fighting, she poured the energy back into the frayed lines of her master’s body, she righted the crooked and cracked lines, filling them, mending them.  The out flow stopped, the internal flows resumed, skin healed, muscles re-knit, bones set as she delicately yet forcefully rebuilt the intricate pattern of lines that made up a living being.

They were set back the way they were meant to be…a part of her mind told her stop, she had already gone too far in what she had done…but her heart told her to go on, to fix natures errors and imprecisions, to correct, to perfect. 

She started changing the lines, smoothing the corners into elegant curves, streamlining the disparate veins of life force into simpler, stronger and more efficient patterns. 

A part of her mind told her this was wrong, unnatural, an abomination….her heart didn’t care anymore.

Sofa gasped, her breast heaving upwards as she came back to life.

Milaea lay down holding her master as she fell into sleep.
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Sofa floated gently in the bacta tank opposite her.  The hum of the hyperdrive and occasional metallic clank the only sound.

Leaving Cygrat had been a blur, she had simply gone through the motions of debriefing the local authorities and arranging the transport back.  She could barely remember arranging for the bacta tank and leaving the planet.

She wished she could say the same about the fight.  The memories were all too vivid…every step, every movement replayed in her mind…

She had done things…things she didn’t even know she could do till her body had done them,

She had known things she hadn’t known she knew till she thought them

She had power, power she didn’t even know she had till she used it.

It scared her.

She didn’t know who her enemy even was…she had sensed her master in trouble after arresting the group she had tailed and raced to the scene.  The opponent she had faced was stronger than anyone …stronger than Sofa, than Soryu, Master Kimar…possibly even Yoda…

Yet she had matched him at every turn…it was like…a feedback loop, as much as he pulled on the force she could pull on more…she worried about just how much further it would’ve gone had he not threatened Sofa. 

Then there was Sofa.  Floating…unconscious still…oblivious to the world…would she know what Milaea had done to her…did Milaea even know what she had done to her?

She caught her reflection in the bacta tanks glass, not a scar, not a cut…someone had poured sith lightning all over her multiple times and the worst she had experienced was some burnt off clothes. 

In her dreams she fought like that…no not like that…even more powerfully…it wasn’t just what she had just done that scared her…it was what she might be capable of doing….
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By the time she reached Coruscant she had calmed down, Soryu and Kougal the chief doctor were waiting in the hangar to take Sofa to the infirmary.  She had debriefed the Masters on the events on Cygrat, the arrests she had made before rescuing Sofa had yielded valuable information, they were working through a group called the Sons of Kessel, violent abolitionists operating in Hutt Space.

“Sith Lightning”  Kimar asked incredulous, “You are certain,”

“Completely,” she said confidently

“This is very troubling” the Gado Master Gurrlum noted looking across to Kimar, “But not inconsistent with other reports we have had about this group…”

“Possibly a Dathomiri” proposed the Cerean Master Ha’Siri’Kum

“Or worse,” noted the only other human master apart from Soryu, Keishar Yoren.

“I doubt that a Sith would be running guns for anti-slavers,” Kimar noted, “Well done Padawan Milaea…”  She could never tell if Kimar was sincere or not, but then she didn’t often speak before the council.

“For now you may remain here to recover, you are relieved from this mission,” Soryu coughed and glanced at him, Kimar rolled his eyes a little,

“with this development, and your master injured, the council feels this needs to be escalated and dealt with immediately, Master Gurrlum and Soryu will take over the investigation into this ‘Sith of Cygrat’.” He said with a tone that left no doubts as to the finality of the meeting

“Congratulations Padawan, you are well on your way to being ready for the Trials “ Soryu added to affirmative gestures from all the other masters but Kimar.

“Thank you masters,” she bowed and left.
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Soryu placed his hand on her shoulder, “Rest up try to meditate a bit, reflection can bring clarity,” 

“Thank you Soryu,” She said, he smiled warmly and left her as she entered her room. 

She locked the door and went about her normal rituals, undressing, showering, brushing her hair…it helped restore the normalcy after such a disruption…still she could feel the emptiness of the next room where Sofa would usually be….where in years past she would run in when she had a nightmare…where they would play games, and Sofa would sneak her treats….

She sat on the floor by her bed and cleared her mind by focusing on the clean sparse walls around her, she felt the flow of the force in the tower, the echoes of a hundred Jedi thoughts melding into the ocean of the force…

She let her mind just drift along the currents, back and forth like she was floating on in an anti-gravity spa, one of the luxuries Sofa snuck her out to enjoy now and then. 

Time flowed back as she remembered those times, then flowed forward again as it followed he anxiousness at what would happen to her master…a strong tide of force swept her mind, her vision forward…and forward and forward…

Was it getting darker in here…the flow was becoming black and murky…figures came and went, drifting in and out of life…a room, a large chair solidified in her mind’s eye…

On the chair…a throne, was an old, gnarled man a yellow green tinge to his skin standing in stark contrast to his black robe….he reeked of decay and hatred….she disliked it but didn’t feel repelled by it as she thought she should’ve….

Beside him loomed a huge figure in grim black…a hissing sound for his breath…hatred…hatred of self…burned in this one…more machine now than man…twisted and evil...he waited on the man on the throne…

And in front of them a teenager, kneeling, her hair, long, red much like her own…tight black clothing, fear in hear heart, fear of the man before her…grief that she had no other choice.

The figures became clearer and clearer, she could feel their presence more and more…her heart started to pound in her chest.  Their voices became audible, the crackling of the old man, the resonance and hiss of the machine-man, the affected accents of the girl….yet she couldn’t make out their words.

The darkness became ever more real it dripped from them….it closed at the edges of her vision…she could see the threads that bound them….the blood…the legacy that stretched through the generations…just a shred, a sequence or two of their gene’s…but it was there…a thread that bound them all to her…

In the old man a legacy of black hatred, burning spite at those beneath him frustrating his designs,

In the Machine man the frustration, the red anger, a legacy of being enslaved to another’s will, the pain of trashing against chains that bound your neck

The girl the fear, the dark green nauseating feel of serving another’s desires, of selling your body and soul to survive…the legacy of being orphaned, beaten down, without a parent or guide, without a choice….

Their lines mingled and stretched back across the centuries to her, the black, the red, the green…mingling, twisting in the darkness of time...her breathing became short and rapid, her heart pounding, she burnt and froze all at once….

The old man stopped speaking, his eyes moved about the room…the machine man’s followed, the girl turned….

Their eyes fixed on her.

She screamed
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« Reply #33 on: January 08, 2018, 12:18:17 PM »

Wonderful LSG!  So are we to assume that the Skywalker line has an Aethan descendant in their genealogical tree?  I LOVE that conceit!  SO much better than "midichlorians" or "plot device."  Or is what Milaea is seeing is just a possible future (the red hair girl as a proxy to Luke)?  And great "Twighlight Zone" ending  Wink

Milaea's self doubt despite her actions are perfect: given that she's been indoctrinated (however good their intentions) by the Jedi, her conflict with Jarys proves she's so much more... I am reminded of Paul Atreides n "Dune:" The Sleeper has awakened!

Until next installment friends  Smiley
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« Reply #34 on: January 08, 2018, 03:52:43 PM »

Love the scene with Palpatine, Vader and ... Mara Jade?  ;-)  Sounds like Mara.  She sold herself to the Emperor, became his Hand, and eventually became Luke Skywalker's student and finally his wife.

(SO much better than the new Canon timeline for Skywalker...  sigh)

There is certainly a hint that the Skywalker power is at least peripherally Aethan in origin.  That's an interesting twist.  :-)  It also hints that these guys just didn't have a clue of how powerful they REALLY were...  Which is scary...

But the most intriguing part for me was the healing sequence.  Milaea first restoring Sofa by rebuilding the force lines, then going further and "improving" them...  It sounds a lot like what Karmack accomplished with Ken and to a lesser extent with Zearic on Geonosis.  Granted, Karmack was helped along by a crystal, but still...

Interesting.  Very interesting... 
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« Reply #35 on: January 09, 2018, 12:10:47 AM »

I am seeing a lot of potential connections here. Yes, maybe Shmi is somehow a descendant of the Aethans, and that is why Anakin was such a powerful Jedi, but also maybe somehow Karmack is a descendant of the Aethans as well. Like Karm said, very similar to what happened to Karm and Ken. But could it also be that that is why Valens could see the vision of Karm and Arnor below the temple in (I think) CotA? Lots of interesting paths you could pursue if you wished.  For now, I guess we will just have to wait and see.

But seeing Vader was great.
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« Reply #36 on: January 10, 2018, 02:58:42 AM »

Chapter 9
Soryu
Milaea sat on the side of his bed her head in her hands, Soryu sat beside her an arm around her shoulders trying to comfort her.   

Her scream had woken nearly the entire temple…Her room a mess, glass pitcher of water shattered, the walls crumpled inward, ceiling cracked, glow bulbs exploded, taps in the bathroom had flown off the handles….he had the maintenance men looking into repairing the damage, in the meantime he whisked Milaea swiftly back to his room to avoid anyone snooping over her.

“It was just a dream Mili…it happens, you fall asleep while meditating sometimes”, he tried to lighten the mood, “Huh, I do it at least half the time nowadays…”

She was sobbing, “It was so real…so visceral…”

“You’ve had a shock, what happened to Sofa was terrible…and you’ve always be prone to strange dreams…it’s only natural that this would happen,” he soothed

“There’s something wrong with me,” she said quietly

That broke his heart to hear, he wanted to hold her, like a father would a daughter, but as it was he knew certain Masters considered him too attached to her…yet how could he not feel like a father to the baby he had all but raised, the child who had lit up his days, the woman who now brightened the future for all.

“There is nothing wrong with you, you had an upsetting experience, and using the force so much can leave residues…echoes over days or weeks…sometimes it just comes out like that….the fact you’ve come to me for help shows you’re on top of it though…No Jedi can stand alone, and you know this….” He patted her back hoping she would believe him.
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 “Ah Sofa,” he sat and took her limp hand.

“I remember the last time we were like this…that disease…” he thought back, twenty years before Sofa and six others had been struck with some kind of illness that put them into a deep coma…with meditation and focus he had brought Sofa out of it…but none of the others, some were still alive in long term care facilities, others at the request of families had been allowed to die…to this day it was unknown what had caused it.

“So long ago…and now back here again…” he wept a few tears to see things repeat so horribly…to be back in the ward sitting beside her, unconscious again…Milaea had tried to heal her as he understood it, but the damage had been done by…whoever that had been.

“you and Mili…if ever I had children…it would be you two…no father could be prouder of their children than I am of you…”  He stared up at the ceiling

“I just wish the others could see…see what I can in the life of the force…see what we could become if only we listened…” his tears he realised were not just for Sofa…but for the order…he had seen it become more and more rigid under Kimar…exiling their problems rather than facing them…Odjina he recalled his great friend sadly…andit had only grown worse in these last years with Yoda absent…

He looked at Sofa’s closed eyes,

“I’ll make sure Milaea takes us forward, she’s the future the Jedi need…”  he squeezed her hand in promise…once he had thought Valens would be the one to do what he couldn’t, to lead a reformation of the Jedi...but Valens history and experiences since had…hollowed him…Soryu shouldn’t…but he blamed Kimar for that, his antipathy for Yoda had spread to Valens, assigning him only the most violent and difficult missions…

Soryu had made a hard choice at that time, he had used his influence on the council to protect Sofa and Milaea rather than Valens from Kimar’s rule… he had to live with that…he hated the fact he had to make the choice and play politics at all…

“It’s going to be alright Sofa,” he said more to convince himself than anyone else.
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“She would’ve recommended her for the trials I have no doubt,” he leaned forward toward Kimar who was reclining back in his office chair.

“Be that as it may…she is not able to do so,” Kimar replied only half interested

“Then I personally recommend her…” 

“You know only their own master can do that Soryu,” Kimar cut him off, “why the hurry?”

“Iivs…” he used Kimars first name hoping to appeal to him more directly, “I feel…and have felt for some time…that Milaea, represents a great opportunity for all of us as Jedi…I can see something great in her…something that could, I don’t know reinvigorate the Jedi, keep us from becoming…static,” 

Kimar lifted a brow, Soryu hoped he hadn’t offended him, he knew Kimar was dedicated to the Jedi, but too often he came down on the side of preserving things as they were, holding to the Light and obeying the desires of the Republic without question.

“hmmm…I must admit, of all the padawans out there she stands out…I wish to be certain that she is truly firm in the Light you understand…such power can be…”

He left the sentence for Soryu to fill in with any number of possible responses, dangerous the most obvious, but threatening, corrupting and destructive were close behind.

Kimar blew out…”Alright…I can arrange for her to temporarily be placed under another Knight or Master...an independent assessment of her abilities and knowledge in the field…if they concur with your assessment, and if Master Neirai is not better by then, then I will allow her to undertake the Trials,”

Soryu nodded, it was a very fair offer. He didn’t want to push his luck but something told him this was the time to say it,

“Might I suggest Knight Valens?  He has no apprentice, and is an excellent judge of character and highly respected.”

Kimar pursed his lips, Soryu felt on edge worrying he had gone too far

“Yes…I had a special mission planned for Knight Valens…if Padawan Milaea was to accompany…it would be an excellent test for her dedication and understanding of the Light and to the Code…So much so I might count it toward her Trials in fact, depending on how she performs,”

Soryus felt his heart rise, “That sounds excellent Iives, thank you,”

“Don’t thank me yet Soryu,” he cautioned, “It will not be easy,”

“I sincerely hope not” Soryu agreed.
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The archives project had seen twelve Jedi killed by an insane woman under the influence of a Sith claw artefact…whilst Valens had destroyed the claw it had shown up the Jedi’s overconfidence.  Now when there were any reports of Jedi deaths or force users that were not Jedi, Kimar had directed at least one member of the Council must be dispatched with a task force of no less than four Jedi Knights.

Soryu stood in the Temples Southern Hangar as the team assembled, himself, Gurrlum, Master Hk’Tn his Padawan Feori, Knights Beldan, Corana and Hissana Cree.  Two Jedi council Masters, one other master, three knights and a Padwan was a strong show of force…it was necessary, they could not risk a repeat of what had happened twenty years ago where pairs of Jedi had been picked off.

Gurrlum had been appointed to lead the mission, the nubile Gado stood apart from Soryu to address the group,

“We are heading first to Cygrat to investigate the site of the battle, I want no one under any illusions about the danger here, the being we are searching for defeated a Jedi Master, and was still capable of then matching a highly skilled Padawan…this is a highly trained and experienced individual that we cannot underestimate – no one is to become separated from the group unless under my direct orders,”

Soryu noticed some concern on some of the face,

“This may seem strict but the Council has determined in these situations we must not take risks…any questions before we depart,”

The torguta Hissana spoke up

“Are we dealing with Sith, Master Gurrlum?”

“Possibly,” he replied honestly “this is why we are investigating in force”,

Beldan now entered the conversation “We’re not seriously going to start a fight with the Sons of Kessel over this are we?”

There was much sympathy for the Sons of Kessel among the Jedi, in Hutt Space and the outer rim they fought against the cruelty of slavery where the Republic…and by extension Jedi...did not, at least one Jedi had joined them years ago…there remained amongst the ranks of Knights a nasty rumour Kimar had sent another Jedi to bring them in…with fatal consequences.  A ripple of concern spread out like waves from a rock thrown in a lake amongst the others.

Soryu looked down, he knew the truth behind these rumours, Kimar had sent Valens to bring in Eonie Corusa, an Asarin, a mono-gender species from the Kroonacht Cluster, zhe had joined the Sons of Kessel for only a few months…Valens had caught up with zher on a dusty planet somewhere on the edge of Hutt space…he couldn’t convince zher to abandon the mission zhe was on so followed, unfortunately zhe had been killed soon after…the timing of Valens arrival made the death suspicious but Soryu knew Valens would never kill another Jedi in cold blood, and he could not believe Kimar would use a Jedi to assassinate someone, no matter their opposition to the council.

“The connection of this individual to the Sons of Kessel is only speculative…they could simply be a smuggler, middleman between the Cygrat factory and the Sons…as such I hope it will not come to that,” Gurrlum said seriously, “However we cannot allow such a dangerous individual free reign…even beyond the boundaries of the Republic,”

Soryu couldn’t suppress the concern showing on his face at the thought of Jedi being used to hunt down ‘dangerous individuals’…

By your actions you're truth was known - was this what it meant to be a Jedi now? 

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« Reply #37 on: January 10, 2018, 03:44:39 AM »

I really liked this chapter. Not just because it is Soryu, but because he knows how much the Jedi order is failing, but he also knows he can't do anything about it. Definitely one of my favorite characters. I also liked seeing a more relatable Kimar. This chapter changes my view of him a bit. I still don't like him, but he seems more real. All he really wants is what is best for the Jedi order, he just doesn't know what that is. I think he also maybe feels a bit of guilt from expelling the Mak'Tor, even if it isn't stated.

Anyways, great chapter.
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« Reply #38 on: January 10, 2018, 03:33:32 PM »

LSG, excellent entry!  As Teagin stated, I really appreciated the interplay between Soryu and Kimar.  He does come across as very real, and I also get the impression that he wants what is best for the Jedi Order.  However, he has obviously tied that "best" to being the Republic's enforcers - especially for the special interests that have caught his attention or loyalty. 

I really liked this thought on Soryu's part: 


Soryu couldn’t suppress the concern showing on his face at the thought of Jedi being used to hunt down ‘dangerous individuals’…

By your actions you're truth was known - was this what it meant to be a Jedi now?


He's obviously VERY concerned for the Jedi as a whole.  I think he's going to be crushed when he realizes that Valens has been playing them all from the beginning (20 years!  WOW) and Kimar really DID send a Jedi to assassinate another Jedi - because zhe had become a 'dangerous individual'...

Excellent entry!
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« Reply #39 on: January 11, 2018, 10:49:46 PM »

Chapter 10
Valens
He gazed at Sofa, lying there…it was not like when she was asleep beside him…she seemed…emptier…as though the emptiness that ate at him had spread to her.  He felt conflicted about this so called ‘Sith of Cygrat’, he had almost killed Sofa…but in so doing had pushed Milaea to start to unleash her true powers…perhaps if he had seen the original state Sofa was in he would be angrier…

He noticed the changes Milaea had wrought upon her…changes only someone who had seen her as close as a lover would notice…her face was younger, the thin lines of age around her eyes vanished completely, her breathing stronger…

Milaea had done a very good job healing and improving her….but she hadn’t finished properly…she hadn’t consciously known how….Valens did.

In some ways it would be easier to leave Sofa like this…one less complication as the denouement dawned…yet for all the love she had shown Milaea…all the support…and all she had been to him…all she had given him, more than she really knew…he owed her something in return.

He looked around to be sure no one was watching and took Sofa’s hand in his, it was only lukewarm…

After he had been knighted he had spent his first three years travelling the Galaxy with Yoda…he had learned so much…but the tension between them had grown.  Milaea meanwhile had been looked after with the other infants the Jedi abducted…Soryu and Sofa had given her the family, the father and sister.  While he was off on soujourns to other force culutres, missions and implementing his strategy to revive his people, they had cared for Milaea as he never could.

Sofa seemed to shift slightly, raising him from his reveries, but it was merely stray muscle twitches.

Even now as Sofa lay there he could sense Milaea’s touch upon her, not just the healing, but on the thin blue sewn band around Sofa’s left wrist, Milaea had made it for her when she was 6.

While Milaea grew, and he was off on missions and sojourns, Soryu had made sure Sofa was appointed as Milaea’s master, keeping them together.  By that time he and Sofa had long since begun their affair…her memories he had stolen, their love for Milaea, Sofas need for affection, and his drive for a substitute for Shilea made it inevitable in a way.

He looked along the length of Sofas still body…a body he had seen and enjoyed dozens of times before…a substitute for his wife…yet he had been with her hundreds of times more and knew her more intimately than he had ever known Shilea…there was something sad and…confusing about that…he shouldn’t be thinking about Sofa that way…he shouldn’t betray Shilea just because she was dead…for the moment…

Yet the thought of coming so close to losing Sofa hurt him…but in the end she wasn’t an Aethan…Shilea dead as she may be was…more’s the pity he thought with a stab of guilt.

He sighed heavily and again checked his surroundings, visually and in the force.  If not an Aethan by blood or culture, perhaps she was one by proxy due to her relationship with him and Milaea.  He gazed deeply into her face seeing the lines of life through which the life of the aether flowed…Deeping his vision into her brain he saw the broken paths and gently used the aether to realign them, strengthen them, improve them. 

The monitor beside Sofa showed a spike of brain activity as he finished…it would still take a little time for her to wake…he gently stroked her cheek with the back of his hand…things were coming to a close, Milaea was on the verge of accessing her true power…he had no time to look into this Sith of Cyrgrat.

He leant forward and brushed his lips against Sofa’s, wishing she would suddenly kiss him back.

She didn't.

He stood slowly and aced away....by the time she woke he would be gone.
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The council chamber was dark, the orange glow of the setting sun cut in ribbons by the shadow of the skyscrapers.

Kimar sat, fingers pressed together in his chair.

Valens walked to the centre of the room and waited for him to speak,

“I have an assignment that requires your valued discretion and your…skills” he said,

Valens nodded in reply,

“here,” Kimar used the force to float a datapad to him, Valens kept his hands behind his back, glancing to look at the screen.  He was in his full armour, blasters and grenades holstered and primed…from the outside looking in he looked more the part of a mercenary or assassin and Kimar a scheming crime lord.

The read out showed a cold planet, and details of what Kimar thought was there. 

“I want you to either confirm they are there, or if not track where they are now.  Once you have the location you will report back to me,”  he leaned forward eyes hardened, “and only me, then we will determine a course of action,”

Valens nodded, he used the aether to take the datapad and turned to leave.

“One more thing,” Kimar caught him,

“you are to take the Padawan Milaea with you…test her abilities, her loyalty, her discretion,”

He turned his eyes in thought,
“If she does well…I will count it toward her Trials on her return, do we understand each other,”

Valens bowed,

“It will be done Master,”

As Valens left he could feel Kimar smiling.
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Chapter 11
Odjina
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A spike in the Song…a shift in tempo…a sudden surge in volume…no words could accurately describe what he had just felt…something old…dead scratching for life…and yet terrifyingly new…reborn…renewed…the conflicting sensations threw him out of his meditation…

His eyes opened to his room, the dark grey stone of the walls flecked with light permafrost crystals, small compared to the larger clusters in the main chamber, but still enough to resonant with the force, amplify his song and his meditations. 

He rose slowly…something was moving in the force…

The room was large but sparse, desk a bed, some small personal effects…though they had been there for nearly 15 years…though the permafrost crystals were welcoming and now long since tuned to them…there had always been an undercurrent of pain...loss.…he could never determine why though.

He looked at the small collection of holo-picts on his desk…there had been much joy here on Vyth, in prize of place was a pict of himself with Ho-Li-Mack, her new born daughter, Ha-Ona’Mack, and her brother Jo’Set’Mack…both had come of age here…

But there had been pain…Holly’s husband Jy’Re’Cam had died when his ship was destroyed trying to navigate out of the deep core after repairing a faulty listening post….

He had once wondered if the pain and loss he felt haunting this place had been a carryover from their exile from the Temple…or further still the echoes of his poverty as a child on Ryloth before the Mak’tor had taken him in, a generosity and acceptance he could never repay.

Or perhaps his guilt at sending Jay on that mission…he had felt such a strong call in the force when the post went silent…that was why he sent a Koawan…

Perhaps it was simply his inability to truly let go of his frustration that he sensed…no one else seemed to sense the pain and loss he did…only the happiness and success of the colony.

No…it was growing stronger by the day…yes something…had changed…he glanced at his comm link… it had been years since he had spoken to Soryu…he missed his friend deeply, a greater ally amongst the Jedi the Mak’Tor had never known – to be so callously rent asunder…

He breathed deeply to calm himself…

Trust the Singer….he reminded himself…Something was coming…he needed to be prepared and to see through the competing Songs to the true Singers voice beneath… 

Settling back into a lotus he reconnected the opening bars of his song the crystals taking up the tune…he needed to find the thread again...
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For Some Further Background after reading Chapter 11 Please see Interlude "The Father" which occur approxmiately 8 years before Legacy of the Aether.
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« Reply #40 on: January 11, 2018, 11:46:09 PM »

Wow...  More details of Odjina and the Mak'Tor colony on Vyth...  I'm thinking that whatever Valens is planning has something to do with the death of the Mak'Tor.

Or maybe not.  Might be something else...  Whatever is coming, though, this is well written.  I love Valens' attachment to Sofa.  It humanizes him and makes him relatable.  Its good to know that he cares ... but he won't let that stop him in his overall plan.

And Kimar has no clue what he's unleashing...  Or who his henchman is... 

Every time I read more about Kimar I end up disliking him more.  :-)
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« Reply #41 on: January 13, 2018, 10:32:09 PM »

These three chapters are perfect examples of how to write multiple, disparate character situations while keeping the overall narrative progressing.  I am completely invested in these people...but I feel that there are some things on the horizon that are going to be very, very bad...

I love the interweaving of the history of the Mak'Tor within the story of the Aethans  Smiley

I can't wait to see where this is heading  Wink
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« Reply #42 on: January 15, 2018, 02:26:14 AM »

Chapter 12
Valens
“A present?” Her eyes lit up with surprise,

“That’s right just for you,”  they were in the cramped living quarters of the Andis, most of the ships original open space was taken up with engine, weapon, shield and stealth modifications.  He lifted the heavy trunk and placed it beside her on the overly clean bed.

Milaea flipped the locks and gasped as she opened it, they had a good relationship, he would often train with her and Soryu when they were on Coruscant at the same time, he’d show her force tricks he had picked up.  They’d occasionally meet up on other worlds – when he and Sofa could arrange a rendezvous.  Milaea knew about the affair, but she would never turn on Sofa, and whatever made Sofa happy made Milaea happy…her caring nature hadn’t been trampled by brutal reality…not yet.

“What…oh,”  she lifted one of the upper arm pieces,
“Gee its heavy,” she turned it around, “Very heavy…what’s it made of?”

Valens smiled, “It’s called Blood Stone…a very rare ultra-dense mineral from the deep core,” 

“Wow…I’ve never heard of it,”

He chuckled...not in this lifetime she hadn’t…

“Few people have Milaea, few people have,”

“Will it even fit?”  She asked taking out the main torso piece, running her hand along the panelled blood red gloss.

“It should, Sofa gave me your measurements,”

“hah, and I thought she was sniffing my underwear and stealing my clothes,” she joked

Something seemed to strike her,

“But why would I need armour?” 

“Why would you go into battle without it?”

She shifted in her seat, “I guess it’s just not the typical Jedi thing to wear….”

He leaned back and crossed his arms,

“And how many Jedi lose limbs, muscle or take hits from stray bolts that would’ve been at least reduced by armour as a result?”

She nodded, “That’s true…make sense,” she flicked a glance to Valens own armour on its stand in the corner,

“You’re not going to give me a blaster too are you,” she probed him gently in the force, 

“Ha you are!...wait don’t tell me…”  her mind on his was light and cool…gentle…for a moment…just a moment he felt almost…almost whole…being with her…he felt perhaps all his planning…all his fighting might yet succeed....he just had to keep going…keep the despair and ravenous hollowness at bay just  little longer

“A combat rifle and blasters!”  she pointed to another crate opposite, “Where’d you get the credits for all this!”

He closed off his mind from her probing, as her fullness left his emptiness returned,

“That…is my little secret.”
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Death was all around them…the very air was full of it…it felt oddly comfortable as the persistently haunting phantom of his grandfather found kindred spirits in the dead…and what the Jedi would call darkness too…that was why he had brought her here…yes Kimar he would test her…but not in the Jedi way. 

He levitated in a sitting position beneath a shattered entrance to a tomb, sending a barrage of rocks and debris from all around at Milaea.  She kept herself airborne dodging or batting them aside with a heavy training sword, sweating in her new armour beneath the Korriban sun.

“364 to the power of three,” he said finishing the barrage of questions on maths, physics, history and geology he had bombarded her with just as much as the rocks…so far she had not faulted, physically or mentally, another hour and the sun would set…three hours…impressive.

“48 million…228 thousand,” she barely ducked a larger rock, “five hundred and forty four” 
Good now for the twists…
“This planet what is it called and why”  he had not told her on the way.

“Eh…based on the red sand, the tombs, the death and darkness in the force…Korriban I guess,”

“Know or know not, there is no guess,” he made use of one of Yoda’s turns of phrase

“Then I Know I Guess!”  she chided

“Why am I watching you train,” 

“huh…”  that stumped her

“Perhaps you didn’t hear, why am I watching you train?” he sent a long collapsed column of stone at her, but not as a projectile, as a barrier, he kept it following her face to block her vision as she moved.

She seemed lost in thought for a while….

“To test me,” close he thought

“Try again,” he could feel her disappointment in the aether

“to learn…learn my movements?”, closer

“why” he asked

“So you can work out how I can improve?”

“Try again,” that really struck her, more as odd than anything else,
“to see how long I can last,”  sloppy he thought and he let his feeling echo in the aether,

“No…so I can see how you fight, so I know how to kill you,”

She paused too long shocked by his statement, his hands still in his lap he raised his blasters with his mind and fired at her.

She moved rapidly in response, cutting the column in front of her in half with an aetherically charged blow, falling back onto the ground and leaping behind column for cover.  He kept up rocks from behind her as he moved the blasters above her. 

She dodged and rolled across the red sands, slowed by the still unfamiliar weight of her armour, hours of training, and her unwillingness to use the aether fully on a world where it stunk of decay. 

Nonetheless she remained un-hit, she sent her own rock flying smashing one of the blasters, she was starting to panic, she didn’t understand what was happening.  green shots rained down upon her, she dug into the aether to use the column to shield herself overhead.  But as she did he came face to face with her, his lightsabre ignited, a pale white rather than green in the red sun.   

Shocked she fell back, he pursued, she was under fire from all directions…she had no choice…just as he wanted.  She blasted him with aetheric energy, but he swiftly reduced himself in the aether, it glided past as he kept advancing

She fired reams of rocks from behind and to the side of, everyone he mirrored back at her.  She moved to crush the blasters with the aether, he teleported them aetherically to his side.  He kept advancing. 

She flung the column at him, tried to attack his mind, as she retreated…he kept advancing. 

She looked around the barren waste, she had no weapon but herself left, she finally gave in to her powers…Just what he wanted. 

A torrent of dirt exploded as she pulled the very bed rock up several metres over his head to collapse down on him.  Quickly he moved to the side, only to be met by a heavy aetheric blast that knocked him off his feet into a backward roll.  As he recovered he noticed he had lost touch with one of his blasters…it had vanished….good he thought she needed to lose all limitations to her creativity.  Dust all around obscured his vision…then a shadow…then she came.  Her training sword battered down on him with a heavy blow, but fell to pieces against his sabre, he pivoted round then stopped dead.

“Well done Milaea…” he couldn’t avoid seeing the blaster millimetres from his left eye, his sabre at her neck…today they were evenly matched…

Today…

The dust slowly settled around them, her anger, her confusion came like heat waves.  He decided now was not the best time to play the “master knows apprentice needs to guess” game the Jedi liked so much.

“Learn this…you are never safe…everything you do someone is watching and working out how to use that to kill you…never show anyone your whole self, you’re full capabilities, the day you do is the day you lose any chance of surviving.”

She stood there for a long time taking it in as her breath returned to normal.  Finally she lowered the blaster, he deactivated his sabre.

Pain!

His head snapped back and he tasted blood for the first time in years…she had just kicked him in the face…

“It is unwise to lower your defence” she said with all too much glee.
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« Reply #43 on: January 15, 2018, 06:21:11 PM »

Valens is the ultimate combat pragmatist.  And if Milaea is close to his potential now I wonder what's going to happen when she...er, "manifests" the goddess...
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« Reply #44 on: January 16, 2018, 02:26:21 PM »


“It is unwise to lower your defence” she said with all too much glee."

LSG, I am again thrilled to read your story.  I think Millea is indeed even Valen's match.  She certainly learned the lesson well, and anyone willing to give her mentor a kick to the face...  Ouch.
I think she might be a little ... upset at his unorthodox training method as well.  ;-)

I am with Dutchman - when she manifests the Goddess (if that is indeed her destiny) then they all may be in for more of a ride than they are expecting... 

On another note...  Bloodstone.  Love it.  :-)
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